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for Unintentional Wet Dreams

by Severus1snape

schedule July 11, 2017 at 12:00 AM

UAU! Isso foi quente. Se é assim com o Harry dormindo, imagina como seria ele fazendo isso voluntariamente e acordado. 

schedule May 25, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Well this is an interesting one. Liking, even if poor Severus is the one taking it.

(A few minor errors:

Ch1: you put conscience when you meant conscous; horrible, when it should have been horribly; simply when 'simple' would be correct; and Your instead of 'You're' [You're cooking breakfast].

Ch3: though when you meant thought; wanked when it should have been wanking.

Ch4: cub was used instead of cup [cup and squeeze]; thump used instead of thumb [thumb across the head]; and were used which wasn't needed [Harry were much enjoyed])

Hope this is useful! Looking forward to more. SP