Chapter 8.
Goodness, the scene with him kneeling and rubbing the potion into her skin is just amazing and her reaction... hmmm... this story is very intense. I have no idea how can you write something so great while not being well... I find it difficult to think clearly or even put few pathetic words together.
I have to tell you that his wanking sessions are mouth-watering. Thank you!
“Could you possibly . . . make me some more?” -I can't believe it! Hahahahaha I think you just made my day, I love you Dessie ;)
P.S.
Sorry for mistakes in my reviews, can't focus.
Fox xx
Chapter 9.
Semen salve -love it! hahahaha he can also make semen-based potions and lotions, creams and deodorants, lubricants and stomach calming droughts -special line of cosmetics 'Severus' Essences' :))
Ohhh that is just great! So they are curing each other. Nice.
Thanks
Fox xx
Chapter 10.
She needs it freshly made, straight from the source -hahahaha. Is it just my impression or are you feeling better? Because I certainly skipped at least few circles of hell in a recent hour! :)) I wonder what will she do to make it up to him...
I like their kind of healing sessions. 'I'll be back' -like Terminator hahaha
Fox xx
Chapter 11.
'The student relaxes, clearly uncomfortable with catching him day-dreaming and relieved to be back on the receiving end of his, more familiar, contempt.' -nice, poor Snape
“I’m just concerned that that waiter will be wondering what I’m . . . doing to you.” --love this.
'but the way it is delivered, the emphasis on ‘doing to you’, lubricated by the slick reverb of his baritone—it strikes her right where she imagines her uterus to be' -oooh, give me more!
The-finger-licking left me breathless... and “Not this time,” he mutters bluntly. “Bill, please.” -is a killer line! Snape is really enjoying himself, isn't he? Trust a Slytherin King to 'help' you...
Brilliant chapter.
Fox xx
Chapter 12,
Maybe it's my state of mind, but the sex had a sad lining to it... it was touching and a bit sad, and hot and yummy. Kind of holistic treatment for the both of them -body, mind and soul rejuvenation...
I loved it. Can't wait now to see what they do next... now that she fixed her inside and outside lady bits. I don't think he should let her out of his rooms. In my humble opinion they should utilise is to the limits.
Fox xx
Oh gods! Sad sex scenes--the epitome of cognitive dissonance :) This was so sweet . . . and hot . . . and touching . . . and perfect.
The bit where he tells her to take what she needs was brilliant. Love the parallels. And her being the wet wipe for his wanking was lovely :) She was smart to use his magic spooge to heal her pussy while injecting herself with semen serum.
Fav lines:
"in the static rip of Apparition"--great description.
"traversing the starched parapet of his shirt collar, and spilling over to the warm flush of his throat"--Oh gods. The words! So good :P
"the knotty knolls and tors of his scar."--Again. High calibre word porn.
"the open field of potholes and trenches that relate the torrid story of his existence"--Fuck, this is fabulous.
I'm excited to see how things change between them now that he's been inside her (and what health perks she'll derive from the internal application).
And it sounds like you deserve something special after all your hard work. - Thank you, I'm glad that you are also planning to go, I'll be sure to tell you my impressions when I return ;)
That’s exactly what I was hoping to convey but not nearly so eloquently. - You conveyed it, obviously, or I wouldn't caught on tit. It is one to write it in the story and other to summarise it. I would love to have your mastery with words :)
thanks for that! - you are very welcome, glad to be of some help :)
there’s nowhere to hide in this caper - FUNALLY!!! <3
Likes/comments:
rigid angle of his elbow which allows her to cling on - great description
over-sized bell clapper - hahahahaha fantastic :D
“Dessert?” - most delicious invitation to sex you can get, more so in their case, Sev you sly dog you :D
The moment she started to undress him, my hun was watching something on YT and from speakers I heard Adagio part of Moonlight sonata, I can't describe to you how that perfectly fitted in your story! The emotional response is...beyond words.
Your sex scenes are always fantastic and hot, but in this story they are somewhat smothered by the emotional or maybe situational burden, not just her but his as well. You end up hoping that pashion can surface, it is there, you can see it...but unavailable for them. So you end up bit short of breath and frustrated at the same time.
“Take it . . .” - I love this entire scene it's so emotional. I just love how you forgo the words in favour of actions.
she grasps the hand resting on his thigh and guides it - it's adorable how thoughtful she is in this scene, I also like how delicate the balance and shift of power is between them.
on a lamp post - lol, very compelling description :)
forehead on his shoulder, fingers curled into his neck. - master of the words, you did it again - with only few words you managed to paint such vivid and beautiful picture for us
I do hope that in the next chapter we will see more of his POV. And I do hope that I'll have good enough net to read it (I'm flying on next Saturday and arriving on Sunday evening in Tokyo).
Love&hugs&kisses from(still!) work swamped and travel excided loon xx
Hi Dessie,
I'm back... Hope you are feeling better, my life is quite shit now, lots of stress, not much sleep, I go through my days feeling stupefied and completing things on autopilot :( need a holiday, a change, a fuck...
Chapter 7.
'Even now, through the many layers, it strains—hard and hopeful. As though it has a chance. As though it hadn’t been abandoned long ago, along with the rest of her womanhood, in favour of a tenuous sanity.' -looks like my life in recent past... when you become a stone carved vessle in which you hibernate, hoping for better days, pure survival...
'But perhaps this was her doing—a normal human exchange, unnaturally warped and amplified by her need to be cared for, to receive the tenderness she has craved. Perhaps she is simply cramming her wilting hope into yet another vessel, expecting a positive outcome no matter how unlikely, crafting another misguided attachment.' -hmmm know the feeling, although I usually hide my hurt and most desperate needs so much, no one ever knows. Sick of being strong.
I like the description of his cock -rise from the dead, nice.
'It’s as though his cardiovascular system has not accounted for this eventuality. As though it is no longer capable of providing sufficient blood to supply both his cock and brain at once. Snorting, he realises he is just admitting that he’s a man.' -OK this brings a smile to my face :)
Plumbing? Hahaha
Ok so I feel this is going to be interesting, to say the least... calcium...? Whichever form...?
Fox xx
wow now I want to know what you do! - I am social (and occasionally market) researcher, majority of my work is sitting behind the PC and writing but one part demands that I do the field part of the research, which explains insane working hours (I don't have precise work day just deadlines).
you already have an unhealthy book fetish as we both know :) - hush, not so publicly :D
I hope you get a break from your travels. - I will and I won't :D. I'm in the middle of project now, but at the end of the March I'll have 10 days of vacation. It is something I've been planning for almost 2 years now, literally, so I could fit it in my schedule, and it is travel - big one at that - I'm going to visit my friend in Japan. So yes, I'll take a break from work but not from travelling :)
Likes/comments:
Daydreaming Snape, mmmm, yes, I can live with that, in fact...This whole scene with him made me giggle. And no, my long-suffering hun is at work atm, so he is spared of my reactions ;)
But more of what? - I just love how you made transition from objectification of their relationship to acceptance of developing emotions and glimmers of hope.Transition from degradation over hopeless forced cooperation to something elated and pure.
None completely resonates with the roiling tension that vacillates between his chest and his groin./He leans back in his seat, relaxing his legs apart. - I just love these descriptions
He felt alive. And perhaps that should be enough. - And here we go...his need to be a human after all and his need to take a bat and beat himself with it in to the ground, one next to the other...drinking tea, perhaps (he is Englishman so tea sounds like good bet).
And then the scene with little version of Hermione, it is sweet and funny, and revealing.
I love how you described the inn they are visiting, sounds magical.
“I’m glad to be of service.” - allow me to quote Oracle "*snort*"
The entire conversation about Jacob is just hilarious! Especially "the compliment" part.
A small smile tugs her lips. Could he . . . like her?/Then reality sets in . . . no doubt he’s just trying to make up for his earlier offense. - yup, that is our Snape. He makes you not only doubt his actions but doubt yourself and your own observations.
“I’m afraid I find it rather . . . insipid.” Snape’s lip curls in mild disgust. “Perhaps you can provide something with a little more . . . body.” - was this fight over the territory? What is he? A dog? "Shoo, this is mine now"
“I’m just concerned that that waiter will be wondering what I’m . . . doing to you.” - bloody hell!
The whole scene with licking is...hot, hot, hot! Even more so because it is so...mundane, something plucked out from real life.
“Not this time,” he mutters bluntly. “Bill please.” - oh yes, she is his...humping (?)...pillow now :D
I just love how you made that every moment they are together is about him more than her. In fact, it looks like she is there some sort of a mirror that shows the glimpse in to to the other's soul, like she is there to emphasize him.
And I'm so glad that we are getting more and more of your old self in each chapter. I'd send you some nice weather but it is rainy and gloomy here, so I'm sending you hugs and kisses XX
I greatly enjoyed the sensuality of this chapter. Delicious.
I love how she'd inviting him into her world and bringing him back to life even more (in non-sexual ways).
"The student relaxes, clearly uncomfortable with catching him day-dreaming and relieved to be back on the receiving end of his, more familiar, contempt."--I'm not sure why I like this, but I think it's because it captures his personality so well . . . through the actions of another.
"None completely resonates with the roiling tension that vacillates between his chest and his groin."--Love this description.
"He felt alive. And perhaps that should be enough."--It's good, Snape, but not enough. You know it's more!
I loved the whole description of the restaurant and Snape's reaction to it.
"That would require me to assume that you have slept with practically everyone in the English speaking world,"--Bahahahaha!
Snape's sly compliments were all great too. So elusively sweet.
Oh, and his treatment of the waiter. Mean but great :)
"I’m just concerned that that waiter will be wondering what I’m . . . doing to you." And "lubricated by the slick reverb of his baritone—it strikes her right where she imagines her uterus to be. "--Unnnnh!
"As he increases the suction, his tongue rolls gently and the raw eroticism of the sensation, as though her finger has penetrated her own pussy, rather than his mouth, injects her core with molten arousal. "--Oh gods, yes! (And I saw that pitched despite my distraction.)
(turns out to be more comforting that she could have imagined--than she could have)
(It is difficult to tell but doesn’t appear uncomfortable--Is there a word missing here? I can't find the sentence in my re-read. He doesn't appear?)
I hope they go back to her room and have nice after dinner jizz-fest. Mmmmmmm . . . healing :)