Oh my gracious! If that is what come up with after an extra week or two, please take all the time you need. My heart and other pink parts are still a quiver from the last chapter and now the emotion in this one! Phew! Thank you for getting us into the "how-will-this-work?" part of the story. The sexier scenes are amazing but it is the emotional insights that really make the story. Without them your Hermione would become a little too Ginny. Thank you for sharing your talents and creativity. Take care of yourself and know we are behind you with all the encouragement and support we can send online:)
Oh. My. God. Please, yes. Detentions with Snape. I'll tell my husabnd I've been naughty. LMBO! ;o) Stirring rod.. *snort, snort, snigger* hahahaha I love you, you're so friggin' hilarious. We could be grand friends IRL, I think.
Ahhh. Okay. On the Snape kiss. Okay, okay. I'm good with where they're at right now. Panty-wetting, knicker twisting, dominate Snape will suffice for the time being. I promise. ;o) I can alway pop over to TMG or the Button duo if I need some hot, Snogging Snape. Ha!
I hope you are continuing to care for yourself to the best of your ability. I feel you there, sweetheart. Depression and anxiety disorders here, as well. Life can be so hard. I'm so glad I rediscovered FF as it's really giving me an outlet with both reading and writing.
I'm glad you're okay with the corrections. I feel bad leaving them, but I'd want someone to do the same for me. I still need to find a good beta to help me with mine (no luck so far - not for one that has a good grasp of the English language, that is). You can only read something for the 20 billionth time without going cross eyed, I'm sure you get that. I didn't see any in this chapter, but I sped read it. I'll read it again later when I don't have six kids screaming and running around to the Laurie Berkner Band.
I continue to adore this story. I was thrilled to see the update today. I look every day. Things are starting to get very interesting and I'm thrilled for the next installment. If YOU need a beta - I am yours - at your complete service. ;o)
Much love, ~*LissaD
Ooooooooo do not keep me in suspense im dying!!!!! Amazing story loving, loving, loving it!!!. Please keep me updated im going for a dirty fourway relationship everyones a winner!!!!! Need more in my life!!
Chapter 23 –
Well it was definitely worth the wait. I love honest, self-deprecating Severus behind the bravado. I also like how he started off apparently quite open to her desire to explore the three of them but seemed to be honing in on his own interests by the end. Get in there, Sev!
‘talk or a test drive’ – hahaha
‘could say stirring rod without giggling’ – I can hear you giggling right now ;)
‘nipple nibblets’ – tasty snacks!
‘I’ll swallow this teacup’ – deliciously sarcastic.
‘Might I bother you for another thimbleful of tea? Mine seems to have evaporated.’ – bahaha, brilliant!
‘There were too many people involved for a relaxed liaison.’ – I’m glad he thinks so too.
‘stroked the the pad’ – extra ‘the’
‘He refused to remind himself just how old he was by coming up with an actual number’ – I love this honest reflection.
‘the magic of a well-timed “good girl.”’ – nice insight into his understanding of her.
‘chasing her vertebra’ – loved ‘chasing’ here
‘her fever brow’ – ‘fevered?’
‘stubborn affection’ – I like what this says about the both of them.
‘rubbing her back like a robot who’d been set to soothe’, ‘as if she’d hit the erection alarm’– brilliant.
‘being offered a two foot keyhole to spy through’ – lovely analogy
‘whole corridor of enema fantasies’ – bahaha, links straight to the haemorrhoidal hallway if I’m not mistaken.
‘Snape brushed his cheek against her hair and closed his eyes’ – something so simple and gentle about this.
And now he’s helping her with her stretches . . . but not for ‘Squatter’s Twat’ this time?
I can't say "sirring rod" without giggling. What does that say about me?
Hilarious Hermione thought Snape was calling her honey. I snorted.
"Explosions keep you on your toes.....out of your mind of there" - missed "if"
I want to note that thoroughly enjoy your continued use of music through this whole story. I'm not missing workds like dance, samba, rhythm, chord, trilled, etc. I like the conitnued play on your title, it's making the whole story that much more enticing for me (musician as well).
"She'd grow to desire the deliverance of submission just as stongly as the desired the emancipation of orgasm." I love this sentance.
I'm in love with the section of this chapter where Hermione wants comfort after her belting and he's so blown away with it. Warms me up to the point I can confidently say if she has to choose one, I'm on team Snape.
Drooling in love with this chapter over here. So good. I'll have to read it again later.
PS: Totally worth the wait!
I forgot to mention my next big pining for it wait is a kiss between these two, I did notice it's missing. Lol! ;-)
Please oh please post soon! Your writing is a great mix of sensual anticipation and humorous alliteration! I love it and can't wait to see where you take them all! Thank you!!!
Chapter 22 –
Lovely continuation from the last chapter. So many bits I enjoyed:
‘eyeballing from the looky-loos’ – I haven’t heard that phrase before but can just imagine how useful it would have been in primary school.
‘tempestuous and primal’ – yum!
‘An icy finger of adrenaline ran up the underside of his balls, freezing him in place for several delicious moments’ – felt that right in my balls too.
‘saddened by the thought of closing the book on such a huge part of his life.’ . . . ‘The aching in his gut wasn’t all mourning. Some of it was longing. Longing to begin again.’ – Some lovely honesty, the need to hang on and let go.
‘deep hints of dappled light flecked the oak and rosewood forest of her irises’ – wonderful description.
‘exhale rattled loose’ – loose is excellent here.
‘Staging has always been one of his greatest strengths’ – I just liked ‘staging’ here – very grand and appropriate for Lucie.
‘read to shag’ – ‘ready’
‘pert nipples speckled in the twinkling lights of the Paris’ – Can just imagine this . . . but I don’t have enough twinkling lights to try it.
‘the suggestive arch of her back’ – nice.
‘dissented’ – ‘distended’? or is it getting rather disobedient? Damn autocorrect.
‘balls deep in a juicy quim’ – such crude eloquence – very Lucius.
‘catching her cries on his tongue and feeding them back to her’ – I loved this.
Now I’m even more desperate for Severus. I feel like he is going to be the most extreme and challenging for her. Exactly what she wants. Or maybe that’s just me ;) x
Chapter 22:
I do apologize my review came at the last moment yesterday. I had a terrible stupid week last week - big paper due on top of normal assignments, plus worked 47 hours and had to ready the house to host Easter. I hate being the adult sometimes, ha! On to this chapter review...
"death bed demand he move on when she was gone" - aww...I'm gonna cry.
Elevator kiss was hot. I bow down to the master of snogging descriptiveness. hahaha
"Lucius wondered if Granger's pussy worked with similar magic. Which whispered phrases would open the vaginal floodgates?" - Delicious word porn with a humorous twist.
"I was read to shag you in the lift." - missed edit - "ready"
I like the endearment "little princess" from him - it fits and feels genuine.
"With a breezy twist, their clothing settled together, interlocked, foreshadowing what was to come." Stunning visual.
Scalded caramel...yummy description.
I'm still riled up for Lucius...I still love Draco. But I'm so freaking excited for the next chapter because I know it's Snape. She should just end up in some weird triangle situation with all three. LOL! No need to choose. LMBO!
Chapter 21 –
I feel choc-full of culture after this chapter (and Easter eggs ;)). It must have taken you forever to research – awesome job. Paris is the perfect environment for Lucius to show off his impeccable tastes and the seduction was beautifully honest which adds a lovely depth to what is developing between them. I keep wondering if Hermione will feel guilty for making all three hopeful that she will be theirs . . . making them emotionally vulnerable and then inevitably having to leave them to their own devices. I imagine time will tell how this will impact upon all of them. I’m intrigued to find out.
‘As if the sunset had melted across each petal’ – delicious description.
‘The thought of losing all that snarky grey matter’ – mmmm . . . grey matter.
‘wetter than Loch Ness?’ – Ahhh, Nessie returneth!
‘giant slag’ – bahahah! Just love that too much.
‘dress robes always made her look flatter than a brick wall’ - *snort* have you ever thought about dress robes?
‘It was like an angel and Prince Charming had gotten it on and had some x-rated lovechild’ – hahahah!
‘clutch over shoulder’ – missing ‘her’
‘Lumpy McTrouserson’ – oh fuck me that’s good.
‘a smug smirk celebrating his successful surprise’ – I’d be smug too, that was an awesome surprise!
‘bad comb-over’ – is this someone we know? Was he orange?
‘personal dining jungle’ – I totally want one of those.
‘have go in the stacks’ – missing ‘a’
‘with a rapturous roll of his eyes’ – I love this visual.
‘eyes inhaled’ – missing ‘and’
‘“Like he is now but shorter.”’ – bahahah, fantastic J
‘wanted you love’ – missing ‘to’
‘I’m not needy, I’m physical.’ – interesting take on intimacy.
The ending was sweet. He’s much more thoughtful and genuine than expected. Bah . . . now I’m confused again as to who I want her with!
P.S. I think I’ve caught up!! x