Chapter 13
I liked Hermione’s perspective this chapter. I needed it. She seems quite relaxed with the whole situation at the moment. It will be interesting to see if that changes.
‘she bum-blocked any further public exploration.’ – hahah, I’m great at that. I bum block the kids all the time.
‘maybe that qualified her for some kind of extended “mate rate” on the Malfoy shag-o-meter’ - *snort*
‘like a date with a detectable IQ’ – I first read that as delectable and enjoyed it, but much more snort-worthy as detectable :)
‘boring robes and mild-mannered meetings’ – I don’t know why I liked this so much. I think it was the mild-mannered meetings of which I have many (although my manners do have trouble remaining mild).
‘battered biscuit’ – Jesus woman, this is killing me.
‘flat’s feline contingent’ – contingent . . . too funny.
‘propositioning her produce’ – fuck, ahhhh, I’m on the way out . . .
‘progressive course of stretching’ – I agree, she does sound at serious risk of squatter’s twat at the moment.
‘Is that Slytherin code for “shag your brains out with my enormous cock”’ – I think that’s a safe bet . . . definitely the assumption that I’d make.
I loved the flower-reading scene . . . especially Snape’s deliciously enigmatic bunch of course. And I also like the idea of taking up maintenance while I write my first book . . . I'm off to make inquiries!
I fell behind a week, but I've caught up. I'm so intrigued with the emotional conundrum Hermione is working herself into. She could easily join Lucius and Severus in a triad, but a tentative relationship developing with Draco. They are still developing separately and yet together, it's interesting
Ah, four lonely and unfulfilled people coming together to find not only what is missing in their lives but, as Snape might have suggested, a sort of emotional sanctuary in each other. I'm seriously loving this story and can't wait to see some one on one tenderness and delicate passion between our horny quartet
Chapter 12
So it wasn’t from my POV, I guess that makes sense :P
I liked the raw smut interspersed with posturing and positioning for the future, each working out how to feather their own nests.
‘laying waste to his sophisticated sensibilities’ – nice.
‘Lucius heard the low hum of heated murmuring and smirked to himself, wondering which track Snape had chosen for his auditory assault’ – yummy!
‘What kind of woman would want some whiny little wanker attached to her tit twenty-four hours a day?’ – whoa, harsh!
‘If I’d known that a nipple was all it took to shut him up, I’d have hired him a wet nurse years ago.’ – bahahah, best line!
‘bridged up off Snape’s chest’ – excellent visual!
‘leg thigh’? – wasn’t sure if this was supposed to be either ‘leg’ or ‘thigh’ or if there was another type of thigh you were differentiating from.
‘"That's our girl. – missing end quote.
‘While he found Snape’s brooding intensity alluring, he preferred the tranquility of a sated Severus.’ – hahah, happy to have both . . . and not too much in between.
‘Draco reminded him of himself at that age, and instead of revulsion, he felt only sentimentality’ – nice bit of reflection.
‘he still be in there’ – he’d?
‘down the spindles of her spine’ – delicious.
Looking forward to seeing who comes out on top, and whether/how Hermione will go about making her choice . . . youth, stability, intellect, experience, love? . . . mmmm x
So I just discovered this site. It's been many years since I've read fan fiction....and even more years since I've read adult fan fiction.
This was the first story I opened. O.M.G. Naughtily delicious. Hot. Enthralling. I read all chapters in the afternoon. This chapter you posted today? Too short. Need more, ASAP.
Your erotica scenes are phenomenal, but my favorite thus far is the flower from Snape scene. How perfectly intelligent. I could see that truly being a personality quality of his, and I am an avid Pottermore.
Well done, can't wait for more! Cheers!
Chapter 11
So of course I was hooked from the start - ‘Sweet mother of all that is phallic.’ – bahahah!
‘enough lubrication to drown a small village’ – ffs, I can’t even progress in my reading because I have to stop . . . and laugh . . . and paste. It’s ruining my flow!
‘the thrill and panic of self-destruction?’ – hmmm, this is rather telling for our young heroine . . . is she biting off more Snape than she can chew?
I must admit the Lucius/Snape pairing I still find difficult to get excited about. I like the relationship on a lot of levels but not quite there on a sexual level. It’ll be interesting to see if I change (you know I struggle to branch out J).
‘blond hair tickling her thighs like cornsilk’ – mmmm, I felt that . . . lovely J
‘any place that beast touched magically became a new erogenous zone’ – hahaha, absolutely.
‘The suction was so strong she swore she could feel it tugging on her uterus’ – and that exquisite exaggeration comes to the fore! ;)
I loved the Snuggernaut/Snapenstein references . . . and now I want to be Hermione . . . I wonder if the next chapter is from my POV?
Chapter 10
Hey, I’m totally behind. Dang it! And, yes, I did enjoy my Sevvy chapter ;)
‘sex-stained voice pleading for his manhood’ – stained is perfect.
The idea of Sev being devoted to Lucius is an interesting one. I wonder what he really gets from that relationship . . . it has been touched upon in terms of the rebound from Narcissa but these days is it much more than physical?
‘flared like cognac in the firelight’ – mmm, now I want cognac and I don’t even know what that is.
And his lovely introduction to deep-throating will no doubt come in handy in the near future. I loved ‘gossamer’ btw.
‘Her needy whines spilled out around his fingers and bounced off his palm with a buzzy hum’ – excellent auditory description.
‘It wasn’t difficult to whip thick to a buttery mouthful.’ – and I want a buttery mouthful ;)
‘crotch of his fingers’ – I fucking love that!
‘It was like a private island’ - *snort*
‘Each mound was presented like a work of art, upthrust and round, moulded for a man’s hand.’ – another excellent description.
‘scoring his taste buds as they tightened to rosy knots’ – even more loveliness!
I enjoyed Sev’s random pique of vanity . . . showing a little humanity beyond the snarkiness.
And now I need the next chapter. Stat :)
I love this! I've read your stories before, but I can't remember if I've reviewed them or not (still a little new to telling the authors how amazing they are!) I was worried about starting this story too early once I read that the chapters will be short, but I'm glad I didn't wait too long! This has been glorious and I can't wait to see how this quartet continues. By the way, the musical titles and quotes are a perfect addition to such a moving piece, and your alliterations always add to any work of art.
Chapter 9
‘I had to feed them first :)’ – fair enough I suppose. You don’t want anyone getting ‘hangry’ ;)
I enjoyed this entire smut entrée. A nice sexual cliffie to whet the appetite.
‘Snape’s glare shot across the table and stabbed him like a dagger’ – brilliant Snape-ish start.
‘dying to pet your mane and stroke your horn’ – bahahah!
‘Miss Granger," Severus called in a warning tone as he rounded the corner.’ – I love a Snape warning. Yum!
‘custardy schemes having been thwarted’ – I hate it when that happens J
‘Both required intuition and artistry, but negotiations were won with bluster, whereas seduction’s sway came from the pelvis.’ – my favourite line. Excellent!
‘stomach pitched severely to the left’ – eye spy!
‘Letting ex-Death Eaters have their way with me doesn't exactly scream sanity’ – no, but it does scream a whole lotta other things . . . and sanity’s over-rated as we both know ;)
‘tranquilize and tantalize’ – perfect!
‘like a cock popping from the suction of a lover’s mouth’ – yessss!
‘flare of Snape's nostrils or the flinty spark in his eye’ – love this description of him.
‘We don't take sex lightly. It’s not a pastime, it’s an art. And we're both masters of our medium.’ – more delicousness!
‘Granger was the gunpowder, and it was time to light a match.’ – okay, now I’m desperate for the next one.
I’ve read this through twice now and loved it. I’ve lost track of who is up next but I’m hoping it’s Sev.
And I found ‘Big Little Lies’ on our telly – starts in 10 mins – thanks for the heads up x
That was very erotic and completely awesome. I really enjoyed it.