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by GreyEyedPhantom

person MotekElm
schedule March 17, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Cute story, but the ending feels abrupt

schedule February 15, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Yay!  I was very glad to see a new chapter up.  I'm very, very impatient and want Draco to find her so I can see their interaction.

schedule January 21, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I'm really enjoying the story.  Jumping from perspective to perspective tends to annoy the crap out of me, but you're doing it in a way that fleshes out the background and the feelings of the characters without feeling forced. 

schedule January 19, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I'm really liking the story and the writing, but after that second chapter's ending, I would strongly recommend giving it a tag more explicit than "angst".  There's a lot of stuff in that chapter that could be very triggery for a lot of people, and the final scene really should come with a warning.  Maybe an author's note at the top of the page for that chapter.