Just read from 19 onwards to catch up. I have to say I stand by all my earlier statements about how much I love this, in a lot of fanfics I've read it can start to feel rushed the further you get into it and lose some of the intrigue that hooks you in the first place, but this still carries a fantastic pace and leaves me with just the right amount of curiosity to want to know more and see where u go with this. I'm utterly hooked I love how you dealt with the dragon, i couldnt help but laugh at Seamus and Ron after the ball, I loved the alternate use for the gillyweed (couldn't help but smile) and loved the whole sequence from start to finish concerning the second task. As you can see I'm totally taken with this, brilliantly written and utterly captivating with twist on familiar story in a universe I love, it is still the best I've read so far, keep it up. I CANNOT WAIT to read the rest.
Another great chapter..as always lol
I am continuing to enjoy watching your story unfold. I am a bit alarmed to read that things will slow-down after Chapter 32; we’re already on Chapter 25! I know that you will bring this to a satisfactory end.
A couple of points:
1.) You’ve captured Tonks very well. Her line about “when you’re a grown-up, you want to forget what it’s like bein’ a teenager,” throws a strong highlight on Harry’s treatment of Ron. For my own part, I would want him to give Ron more of a chance; for them to find a modus vivendi. I have to remind myself that, as kids transition from pre-teen through puberty, relationships change and grudges are strong. Still, I hope for redemption for the two of them.
B.) This may be the first chapter in which Hermione didn’t burst into tears about something. Chapter 24 had only one such instance, but up to then you’d been averaging around three per chapter. That’s a lot. I know Hermione is pretty emotional in the books, but if she loses it six times in a 300 page book, there’s still a ~50 page cushion between each cry.
The high density of weeps-per-word-count has, to me, made her appear weak – not too far removed from the whiny girlfriend who always trips while running from the monster.
I’m glad to see you toughening her up. We know that she is smart and capable. I wonder; was it was your plan to have her not gain this level of emotional stability until the engagement/marriage?
III.) A nitpick (you know I’ve always got one): For the first time in 25 chapters, I’ve caught you misspelling a word. Actually, it was spelled right, but was the wrong homonym. Tonks mentions Moody running, “…everyone through the ringer…” The figure of speech uses the word ‘wringer’ which is a device for squishing the water out of mops and (in old times) clothes.
That’s 5 points from your house for the grammatical error, and 100 points to your house for finding a new use for gillyweed. Now, for the love of Magic, KEEP WRITING! :)
Reading this fic is like watching a passenger train derail. Horrible, but strangely fascinating. I honestly don't care whether it's supposed to be a parody or a legitimately serious effort at retelling, because its hilarious either way. "Harry Stu Potter" is great, and now that he and Hermione are going to marry, the story has gone completely off the rails. I (seriously) can't wait for the next installment.^_^
YES! I have been waiting for Harry to give Ron a piece of his mind!
Awesome chapter mate. I like how you had Harry deal with the dragon
Fantastically written. I Absolutely love this story, each chapter builds just enough to keep you hooked and wanting more. I much prefer the idea of Hermione and Harry, when she chose Ron, and he chose Ginny in the originals it never sat well with me, just didn't add up for a whole host of reasons. I love your interpretation of the characters and how the story has changed enough to make events and people fit your version allowing character growth that makes sense, whilst also staying true to the original concept. Only found this site a week ago, and I've read quite a few posts now as I've always been a sucker for a good story no matter the genre and this is by far the best I've read. I just spent the last few hours reading from start to finish, I couldn't put it down. I'll admit i'm gutted there's no more to read, i'm now eagerly awaiting the next chapter along with the rest of the story. Can't wait, hope updates come soon and often.
Another brilliant chapter mate. I really enjoy how you have the romance play out.
Amazing story hope you continue
If you change the original idea for S.P.E.W. to House Elf Liberation Party, instead of Front, you end up with H.E.L.P. as the acronym.