That humorous ending bit was so delightfully well placed
I've been thinking about your portrayal of Snape. It has to do with bullying, doesn't it? We know how James treated Snape, and that's why he doesn't like Harry, but in your story, Snape witnesses Harry standing up for people being bullied and so starts to change his opinion of Harry. I like how you haven't made it a sudden flick of the switch, but you're making it more gradual, more realistic.
It seems like Ron's idiotic, douchey behaviour is starting to show through in this chapter. I'm not disappointed at all, because it is in character, and quite - natural? - feeling. I'm not sure natural is quite the right word, I don't know how to describe it. For a while now I've felt that Ron isn't apologizing because he feels bad about what he said/did, but because he got called out on it.
I didn't write a review for the chapter, but I wanted to tell you that 'The Owl and the Pussy-cat' is one of my favourite poems, and I started reciting it to myself as soon as I read the chapter name.
I know I'm only two chapters in, but this is one of my favourite Harry Potter stories. I'm so tired of reading useless, "Greater Good" Dumbledores, and even more useless, completely brainless Ron Weasleys, that your characterizations make a refreshing change (although a good Ron and/or Dumbles bashing story is nice too). As a plus, they feel very in character and true to how JK really meant them to be. Another plus is the quality of the writing, nothing annoys me more than bad grammar. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
I won't lie, ive never seen this site and my reasons for coming across it were less then chase. However I've fallen in love with your story, the points you made in the comment section as well on your thoughts of character progression have truly shown. Lest I ramble on, truly I rather love this story, I clicked for shut and by chapter 4 I had hoped that I would find this to not be a discontinued project. Beautiful writing, and a rather solid plot just add on to this. So now thank you for 42 chapters and without meaning to wear you out, I'd personally be overjoyed to see another 42.
Oh undoubtedly. But inherent in all plans there is calculated risk and the biggest plans have the biggest risk. She wants control of the wizengamot and is willing to assassinate members so she can have a kangaroo court system. Subtly had been her most effective ally. She lost that with the trial. That was as subtle as a trainwreck at central station around rush hour.
However, Since the average age of the wizengamot is 87. Most of them have survived both Grindelwald and Voldermort's first reign of terror. They would know the signs of unethical ambition and takes steps. Its going to take time but its hardly an automatic win condition for her. She faces a definite uphill battle of increasing complexity against a dark wizard who is far more powerful than she is and the potters who aren't just going to let her take potshots at them since she's done it enough that its starting to look like a full time hobby.
Your character building is superb.
Wonderfully full fledged characters.
Quick question. Now that the blatant false charge against the potters has been dismissed wouldn't that imply the beginning of the end for umbridge?
Something like that is a massive backfire for her. She revealed that she has it out for the potters and that the mere fact it went to trial means that the ministry is massively corrupt.
She may be a dark witch but politicly maneuvering won't matter much once the spells start flying.
Chapter 39 had roughly half-a-season of Trek-worthy technobabble. ;) Still, it is nice to see that Hogwarts under Dumbledore treats sex as normal and healthy in general (and in this particular case, helpful).
I’m glad to see you bringing in Narcissa the way you are. Her words to Draco about the choices we make was both profound and totally in character. They say that “character is who you are when nobody’s watching.” The entire climax of Rowling’s entire saga turns on her decision - made without preparation or time to consider – to turn to the most powerful and merciless dark-wizard in history and lie to his face. It’s an incredible moment. She had nothing materially to lose by betraying Harry Potter – her son’s arch-nemesis and the person indirectly responsible for her family’s falling fortunes. She – daughter of a proud pure-blood family - could have simply told the truth, and in so doing given Voldemort, the Death-Eaters and lovers of blood-purity their final victory. Instead she chose to do the right thing.
The mutual trust between her and Severus Snape is beautiful. I hope that relationship goes somewhere.
Nit-pick: If Percy Weasley had “wanted to be Minister for as long as he could remember,” would he not have been sorted into Slytherin, or does he just have a very short memory?
Cheers!
This is an amazing fanfic! Easily the best I have ever read in my life! KEEP UPLOADING PLEASE!!!
I left a review on HFLP before it was finished (loved it) and absolutely loved the way you finished it, so much so that I looked for more of your work until I found this. An excellent slow burn, I love the way you really bring the characters to life, this and HFLP are literally the best (in my opinion) and my favorite fan fictions I have read. Thank you so much for your stories and hard work - you write it I'll read it!
That last chapter confused me a bit but I love it regardless â¤ï¸