Glad you put in the due dilligence to get stronger as a writer. It really shows. I like the progression here a lot.
Though I have noticed a few fics where I got so absorbed in the relationship that any smut felt intrusive and exploitative. I guess it depends on the initial tone and speed of that ever increasing lust level.
Yeah, Desk singed my eyebrows off, but that last chapter merely made me raise one in confusion. Oh well.
There are a few fics I've seen that have the characters dirty talk and say how much they want eachother, but then "oh, our poor innocent bodies are too young for any of that, but when you grow some curves I'll be all over them!" Especially Time travel fics. Weirds me out for some reason. At least Backwards with Purpose addressed that with Ginny jumping Harry during pre 2yr summer and then Molly finding them. Added some realism in how awkward that could get. And how pissed Mr. Weasley could become.
Ooh, I read some multi fic with H/Hr/Gin/Gab that had birthday presents be advanced levels of intimacy since Gabby joined so young (Saving girls bonding). Good overall, but that contrived bit was odd. Darn FF and its randomly enforced censorship and easily offended prudes. Can't a man have some PwP that is not too heavy on either P? Balance!
Sorry to ramble, keep posting!
i just love reading ur story. just super awesome. keep it coming buddy
Another good one as always.Lol
I like how your changing events just enough to have Harry and Hermione's relationship grow from their shared experiences.
Another great chapter ron was always this dense don't get the ron gloryholing lol. He was always this thick ...^_^
Love love love
I love their blossoming relationship. So cute. I'm worried about Ron developing feelings for her regardless. A love triangle could ruin their friendship
Great chapter mate. I like how this story is progressing.
this is a ron bashing story. First ron is VERY smart he got 7 owls, that ALL B, he learn advance spell, fought adult death eaters, ron was better then most of the school.
second hermoine was more of a bully then ron, she attack him with birds, she call him a stupid git all the time, she yell at him when he not studying. she far more of a bully then ron, when she meet ron she was very rude, he did not ask for help, so she started to boss him around.
harry did do a lot of studying, he did well in school, they just did not talk about it as much.
ps hermoine was mean to ron far more then she was to him. if she treated ron the way she treated harry he would have been nicer.
Love this story.