Hi DS,
I've checked for the update about 6 times from yesterday... :( it was my day off... can you tell?
I (don't) hate to be a pain in the back side, as I have no shame. Hurry!
Fox xx
And I promise to read the rest as soon as I finish my madness - I'm giving advantage to your madness anytime ;D
always, and yes, cookie jar is always full :) - hmmmmmmmm, yum ;)
Slytherin green perhaps? - and silver, place of the bow...I'll leave that to your imagination...I'm certain you won't disappoint ;)
she arrived, and now I’m a mess :/ - sorry to say, but this time, I'm not feeling guilty, I needed to know! Tho, now I'm feeling like I was hit with "be careful what you wish for..."
“I was . . . angry.” - ok this explained mostly everything about enchantments creation, reason behind it...
“It wasn’t intended to be seen at all. It was a . . . a fantasy written by a jealous and enraged young man. A fictional punishment. I’m equally disgusted by it now. But . . . at the time I was trying to reconcile . . . pain and betrayal. I just . . .” - just so you know, you made me cry
That eventually, over time, she would fall in love with you. Just like . . .” / Her hand flew to her mouth in an attempt to stifle the sob. He was there, arms around her but she pushed him away, lunging up from the chair. - does she have problem with him creating the enchantment or with jealousy?
She opened her eyes to see the tears in his. - you are killing me :'(
“You deserve to be alone,” she ground out bitterly. - ok, have you any idea how I hate her in this moment?
“And yet for the first time in my life, I’d let myself believe that it wasn’t the case. I never thought I’d be able to escape it . . . my abhorrent past. But these months . . . with you . . . admittedly of deception, of delusion . . . have been the best of my life. I’m undeserving of it . . . as you now know but I am . . . grateful. I didn’t mean for any of this to happen. I’m sorry that you feel this was all a set up—a lie. But know . . . my feelings are real. Hermione, I love you.” / His tears were falling freely. - I know I'm bit hormonal today, but...my hun is convinced someone died, I am, literally, reading and re-reading this chapter with a pack of tissues :'''''(
“I’m leaving . . . And please don’t follow me,” she rasped. “I don’t want to see you again.” - can we end the enchantment? I'm volunteering her as sacrifice.... I know everything but...just....grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr.... What the fuck is her problem? He argued for her to be even included, in front of her, at the beginning. He never forced her to do anything. He was, ready to die to protect her. And he is a fucking Death Eater, what is she...blind or dumb? It is expected that he is not goody-two-shoes! Well, I do hope he won't follow, and I do hope she runs in to Draco... (I know I'm mean and petty, and I don't care - she is just cruel to him...)....
Ok, rant is over. And I'm sorry for ranting but...I....just... :'(
I'm waiting for next chapter, let it be soon....
Holy fuck! That's so messed up and sad. I feel bad for both of them (once again). And what a horribly perfect time to admit you love someone.
But I guess this could be partially chalked up to their age difference. Severus is old enough to know life is full of mistakes and rarely goes the way you'd like; while Hermione is still young enough that she hasn't seen what the world's really like. I don't blame her for being disgusted--the idea was despicable--but there's something to be said for leaving the past in the past. People change. It's great to have unflinching principles, but forgiveness can be handy too. (Not that I'm a purveyor of graciousness; lord knows I like to hold a grudge.) So now you've trapped me in a purgatory of feels. I see both sides all too well. Of course I hope something happens so that Severus can prove his devotion to her.
Self-sacrifice is so final though, isn't it?
Wow. :-( I am really glad you said not to lose hope, because that was heartbreaking all around. I feel horrible for her, especially as it did all play out as planned. UGH! But, I also feel terribly for him, since this time he is being punished horribly (mentally and emotionally) for something he didn't ever think would see the light of day. I must admit though, that was a DARK and HORRIBLE and EVIL punishment that came out of that teen version of him. Again, I say, WOW! HG4eva
Please resolve this! Don't leave them (or us) like this for long!!
Bloody hell!!!!!
I love how you refer to your story as ‘the smut’ - hehe, you called it that way, I just play along ;) - besides, calling it "my venture in to the unknown" is a bit pretentious ;)
remind me not to get on the wrong side of you! - that would be quite a feat, do not harm ppl I love and you're safe ;)
careful you don’t break your chair again! - if I say I was holding my laptop on my lap and lounging on the couch reading, you and your wicked brain will get the wrong idea - so I won't say that :P
I’m afraid there may be more twists to come. - I expect nothing less from you
Hahah, Sevirus :) - yes, please :D
You made Parvati sounding so good, that I'm almost sorry we won't see bit of a G on G action with them XD (oh, you wicked, wicked woman - you are dragging me to the dark side - I do hope you have cookies!)
Tearing off layer after layer, he descended upon her - huhhhhhhh, starting hot, and from then on just rising the heat....ok this is official statement - I want your Sev in MY bed (my birthday is in april - wrap him up with a bow ;) )
Or was he simply in the process of writing it . . . right . . . now. - I love it <3
“Whenever we fucking feel like it,” - be still my heart
Her conversation with Harry is so funny and sweet , isn't she enjoying her "bad side" bit too much? That only proves my firm belief - if you hang out around Slytherin's for too long - you start to think like them :D
“I devised the enchantment . . . for myself.” - bloody, fucking, hell!!!
Ok, now you're done it - I don't care, I'm sending you that insane creature of mine - I want next chapter not soon but for yesterday! I just need to know!!!
I LOVE this story and you're killing me with anticipation! xx
My God you love a cliffhanger!!
Pleeeease feed us addicts more as soon as you can!!
He devised the enchantment for himself? What the ever-loving fuck? Well, now I'm chomping at the bit for the next chapter just so I can find out what the hell's going on. (And now I can't stop saying devised to myself. That's going in the word notebook.)
The sex was wonderfully hot this chapter. Bravo.
Favs--
choking into her napkin probably hadn’t adequately conveyed the true depth of her feeling.--*Snort*
Snape’s grumpy old Slytherin sausage?”--Sausage snort.
damp breaths scudding across her skin as the fine rasp of his chin grazed deliciously into the hollow of her collar bone.--I love this whole description but I love scudding the most.
throat-shredding scream--Yeeeees! Excellent adjective.
"Yes . . . it was quite a severe . . . punishment.”--Bahahahaha!
Don don DON!!
was your Severus ever in love with lily?
Dear DS,
To answer your question: To have someone watch me masturbate would make it better in most cases -especially if that someone is trying not to be seen...
Now Chapter 24 (I hate being behind!)
It's nice Albus and Minerva see budding love, I believe, they realised Hermione HAD to try to save him. On the other hand they didn't seem all that worried how she's going to do that...? It seems that it was entirely her plan and her preparations.
How is it, that she suffered punishment of the enchantment? She didn't with Severus. Of course the story is more interesting this way...
I can't imagine the state of mind of the person preparing for painful and violent death, because the alternative of asking for help seems worse... my brain cannot contain it. The phrase her final words had slain him I don't know exactly what is so special about it, but I love it.
Sing -hahaha so funny and sweet, the whole scene is absolutely cute! I hope cute is ok with you.
It felt tenuous and potentially transient but also like a gift—one that he’d never expected to receive again in his life -and another depressive thought, beautifully written, but sad.
The caring, the healing, the lovemaking -lovely chapter and again you didn't disappoint, I got my wish and Severus got a little happiness :-)
Of course. You’re mine -Is. Of course. The best.
Fox xx