I looked this morning and there was nothing, I looked at afternoon and there it is! New chapter ^_^
I'm glad that insane creature that is my muse, have such positive effect on you, and she gave me some space to work. :)
This is such a gloom and doom chapter, difficult to read.
And I can understand her, I really do, but I still can't force myself to think that you either accept to do something and then stick to it, making the best of it as possible (she WAS given the choice) or you just say no.
They are in the same boat, well he is in far worse position than she is, but that is something we know and she doesn't.But, as he was doing his best to make it easy for her, she is still as difficult as always.
And she did enjoy it! That's why she stopped him. Merlin forbid to admit that she had a pleasant experience (as much as it is possible in the given situation), no, she has to lash out. Grrrrr. I can bet that part of her crying was because of it. And, she is going to torture him with her snotty behaviour even when she admits to herself that she enjoyed being with him.
I'm waiting for a new chapter at the edge of my seat and praying that my insane mouse is bugging you hard to continue writing ;) XX
This was so fucking sad, but also pretty damn realistic. I'm too tired to write more now, but I wanted to let you know how much I liked this despite the horrific reality. I hope Snape can make it up to her. And I'm waiting for the bomb to drop with that setup from Draco. Something bad's gonna happen.
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It just felt like a slightly disingenuous claim as he watched his precum dribbling enthusiastically into her slot.
Dear Desert,
Chapter 3. Sad. Shockingly realistic. He, with all his experience, is trying to make it easier for her. She, is loosing her virginity, unwillingly -really, so she tries to make it as mechanical and impersonal as possible. I don't blame her. To agree and to go ahead with it are two different things.
I do hope they will find a way to make it easier. If he doesn't try to talk to her and make it up to her, somehow, it will ruin her. I hope you won't let it happen.
It was an incredibly tense chapter, I was honestly holding my breath. Good stuff. I am truly amazed at how different this story is from your one shot -I couldn't stop laughing there, it was hilarious and sexy. This is the opposite side of the spectrum.
Thank you
Fox xx
If you were going for comforting, you missed it. XD
Good chapter, will return.
Sacrificing individuals for the sake of many - eternal dilemma. I love it! That is what I love about your stories, they have substance beneath them, a small part of "food for the thought" to chew on. Don't ever change that, pls. :)
“I have fifteen minutes.” and “I have fourteen minutes.” - this made me giggle, this is soooo Hermione
Snape waited a heartbeat before spinning around and hurling the jar back into the storeroom, smashing it, and an entire shelf of glassware, to smithereens. - :'(
And, finally, she hadn’t agreed to this for the Order, she’d agreed to it for the sake of Harry Potter, which pissed him off no end. -I would be pissed off too. Brats, all of them, self-centered brats (Now I'm rant on his behalf) . This sentence sums up all the injustice he had to suffer through.
"yes, yes, if she’s still free send her over! :)" -sure, but I have to warn you - she is in a frenzied overdrive atm. I was challenged to write OC/HP story (it is on this site as well, but I would not expect much of it, my writing skills are no where near yours and my english is...horrendous) and she just went berserk - I keep writing instead of working. I need her maybe once a week, the rest of the time - she is yours ;)
I'm digging the darker tone of this story (and it really makes the funny lines pop). I'm not all "Unh! Give me more dirty Snape!" like I was with Db, but I assure you I am still on the edge of my seat. I desperately want Snape to make this fucking amazing for her, but at the same time I feel bad for them both. Semi-rape is no way to lose your virginity (and nobody wants a grudge fuck). I hope they find some common ground and wind up lessening the sting of war for one another. :)
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bristling ‘bed hair’-- Visual alliteration. Excellent.
(sheepish grin, before shovelling --Take out the comma.)
Permutations -- Word notebook.
"I think you’ll find that I am.” -- Hahahaha!
Temerity -- Word notebook.
I also love the bit about sending Dumbledore her blood-stained underwear. I know that's dark, but it made me laugh. And when she tells Snape he's got fifteen minutes to fuck her, I thought I was going to snort myself hoarse.
Well, that's a bit dark, hmm? The bit about sending bloody knockers to Albus especially...I think she should do it.
Then the conversation with Harry, he seems like a boy with no care in the world and she was forced into such decision to protect him.
I'm sorry, I'm in a gloomy mood tonight, but nothing, that spreading my legs for Snape wouldn't fix, trust me.
Impatiently waiting for more
Fox xx
P.S.
I intend to read your other stories too. Your writing is superb.
Great start! And I quite enjoyed the other story, as well! Interesting premises!
*Raises hand* I'm a Muggle, and I'd like to volunteer to be Snape's required fuck please. Is there someplace I should submit my name? I'm sure the list will be full soon, so I'd like to make my reservation early.
I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this (because no matter how I run the numbers, this looks like a win no matter what).
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spitting his words out like chips of black ice.
Yes, yes, yes! Thank you!
I LOVE the idea! Poor Snape, tell me, please tell me we will have story from hers and his side alike.
I can't imagine him consenting with this without severe pressure from Albus and Minerva. Btw, how did Albus made Minerva agree to something like that?
You are successful as always to make my heart crying from pain when you describe Snape and his position, has ... no words.
You have me, once again on the edge of the chair, waiting patiently for the next chapter <3
P.S. : If you need my muse just let me know, I'm still willing to share ;)