Well! I thought: "lucky me, Desert-Dear managed another chapter before leaving..." Ha!
Ohh I can't believe you actually left it there! And went on holiday?! You'll be back god knows when...
But anyway, I enjoyed the chapter and I'm getting a little more hopeful, that everything will be sexual soon :-) I liked her discovery of his different side, by checking his room out and "There wasn’t a single entrail in sight" -disbelieve in this line really got me snorting. It just shows, how little we know of others and, really, we see, only what we want to see.
Come back soon
Thank you
Hopeful Fox xx
Oh I just adore this chapter, it is so misleading, and really forces you to read between the lines. ^_^
Snape at Madam Puddifoot’s! :'D I can imagine him all black and brooding among all that lace and fine china, frowning XD
I can understand her need to know, and to ask questions, but does she has to be so bloody rude?
Yeah, that kind of enchantment does smell like his pedantry work but stinks like Dumbledore's meddling as well. My money is on old meadler.
“And I want you to understand that this is entirely a business arrangement. There is nothing sexual about it, whatsoever.” - yeah rightttttttttt *smug smile*
Waiting for next chapter, please make it his POV this time ;)
You get me back on chewing my finger off, nails are already gone :) XX
Dear Desert,
Chapter 5. I swallowed it in minutes! Ha! We've got some action lined up! And there's nothing sexual about it! I like to get some answers :) Exciting times are approaching. And no, I do not trust Albus, I never truly did. Always found him manipulative and secretive.
I also wanted to tell you, that your writing is wonderful and your English is fantastic, perfect wording every time. Apart from excitement and enjoyment, I get English lessons as a byproduct :-) You and Oracle are my two favourite writers here, I found Oracle first, I hope it's not cheating... I know OO reads and reviews all your stories, sooo maybe a little triangle...?
I will miss you during your holiday, but I will be busy reading your other stories, so I'm hoping I'll live through it somehow :-)
Have a lovely holiday, eat and drink a lot, have lots of sex -for inspiration purposes only, of course... or some research for current and future stories ;) and when you come back, I expect some serious chapters.
Thanks
Fox xx
Well I feel better now that they've talked things out. Nothing like a little hostile "tutelage" to open up the floodgates of understanding. I like angry Hermione, and at the same time, I like defensive Severus. I find them both relatable, and I enjoy the ticking time bomb waiting to go off between them. (I've just thought of some real mind fucks that Hermione could inflict on him in the coming "different appearance" chapters. My brain is so warped.)
Fav line: Both charming suggestions-- Bahahahahaha!
(It was a threat wasn’t it--Comma after threat.)
Well done. I fell sad for both of them. More please.
Excellent counter-scene, giving us a glimpse into Hermione's thought process after the rape-romance fo the last chapter. Another shining example of your mastery of cognitive dissonance. (You haven't pursued that theme in a while.)
Not to be pedantic, but during what year is this supposed to be taking place? (My brain wants to know how much canon it should suspend.)
I loved Snape's bit too. There's so much conflict tied to his predicament. He's neither good nor bad, but trying to do his best with a disturbing situation. Anti-heroism at its finest. :)
I think I'm going to leave my crazy muze with you, I like how you two cooperate ^_^
Now that you mentioned it, and yes I miss that one, how did he managed until that point? But my guess is that he managed to wiggle his way out at the beginning, knowing him he would wiggle his way out of it compleatly if he had any chance. Or is it better to ask, what he did do to lose a privilege of being excluded from Voldy's orders?
Ok, now everyone can call me cruel, but I re-read your story couple of times, all written so far in one go. Why she accepted in the first place? Yeah, I know for Harry. Still, that is a huge sacrifice for someone who is your friend (no matter how close) and someone who is behaving the way Harry does. Sorry, I can't shake the feeling that there is something more behind hers "yes". Maybe we'll find it out later, along with her ;)
"Miss Granger, Please accept my apology." - nearly made me cry.
"Sighing, he tossed them into the top drawer of his bureau." - ohhhhhhhhhhh, this is soooo material for some further heart-wrecking, tissue clenching and snifeling moments.
"Although their previous exchanges hadn’t progressed particularly well, he did at least owe her the opportunity to discuss what had happened." - always the gentleman <3 But more than that, this simple sentence is so deep in its meaning, portraying his character better than pages of text.
"They couldn’t afford to be seen merely ‘chatting’ together so he would take a text and meet her under the guise of tuition." - always the survivor as much as protector :)
Now I can't wait for next chapter and their talk!
P.S.: Message to my muse - bugg her! I want to know what's gonna happen next ;)
Hugs and kisses for both of you XoXo
Dear Desert,
A nice reflective chapter. Did Albus let her know about this choice, so late on purpose? So she doesn't have time to think, engage her brain in shock of it, or ask questions? I wouldn't put it past him. Bastard -should be his middle name...
Snape. I love the knickers in his pocket :) That is just plain naughty and her scent arouses him... hmmm...there is hope for them :) I feel optimistic.
Thank you
Fox xx
P.S.
You are very quick with your writing, I'm grateful. You, Dear Desert, are One Mean Writing Machine.
X
Make more!! PLZ write quicker and more and longer chapters! I love this! Also Snape is really passive in this and i love it. I think they would be a great couple. Like in a hour of snape, it was awesome!
Oh, poor Hermione! AND poor Sev! They really were both victims in this. Hopefully Hermione uses that brilliant mind and comes to that conclusion, herself. Thanks for the update!