Please tell me that was not the whole chapter and it was just a teaser I want more
Oh god...now you're going so fast I can't keep up with you. See I told you she could kiss it better. But now he can't get it up for anyone other than the KIA. Oh dear what a mess and no paper! One of my charming husband's delightful sayings. And it could get doubly messy if he has to "ow's yer father" with a menstrual Hermione. Hmm! I'm sort of seeing Leslie Neilsen in one of the Naked Gun films when he has to produce a sperm sample and a Miss Whiplash doctor gets paged when all else fails. Definitely fancy the eye-patch look....he was made for that. Magnificent and glorious as always my dear and I will try to keep up. Best wishes, Love Ali xxxx.
deepest apologies - It's ok, I didn't meant for you to feel bad (hugs & kisses)
Just get them to read fanfic! - I would, but every time I mention S or H word they start running XD
THis chapter is pure LOVE!!!! <3
“I will make alternative arrangements.” - Grrrrrrr what kind of a man you making him to be? So what if she's "early" - they can still do it ;)
Hermione held in a sigh. He was as bad at this as she was. - I adore you for this, you are master of words! I would sell myself to be able to say so much in one short sentence *deep bow* ^_^
She’d embarrassed him. He really was far more sensitive than she’d ever expected. - yeah! We are back to our fragile bad boys once again <3
she forgot that it might not be something he would know . . . or appreciate - ok, I had a fit of giggles reading this :'D Btw, it's adorable the way she "mother-hen" him :D
He stared at her. She was so bloody difficult. But so . . / He vacillated between wanting to strangle her and wanting to . . . - thank you, thank you, thank you!!! I love you for this!
‘fitted look’ - hmmmmmmmmm, yumyum :)
He didn’t understand why it had happened - ok I'm sounding like Bellatrix, cackling now. You made me bounce of joy :D
the remaining hours of his life to tick away - his self imposed mother-hen won't allow it :D And I stand by my previous statement - they still can do it ;) ffs (pardon my french), he is a Death Eater, like little blood could turn him off...on the other hand...now that I'm thinking of it - it just might :S - damn it :/
Now you got me on that cliffhanger of yours, that you perfected so masterfully.
That's it, I'm sending my insane muse to you again, I'm all nerves waiting for next chapter :*
Well done you! You've hooked us all!!
keen for more!
Before I managed to find time and review previous chapter there is another one today <3 So, now you are getting my opinion on both ;)
if he looks like Snape, why is he your ex??! - not by my choice, sadly apart for looks and behaviour, he sare same fate as Snape from canon (minus the snake and Dark Lord, but the ending is ...the same).
Chapter 8
Whenever she thought about his predicament, his perspective, wondering how he must feel, she was met with blackness—a whole lot of nothing. - I love this part, it explains a lot but also opens so many possibilities :)
They needed to talk . . . properly. - this made me happy, finally she is using that brain of hers, so far she was riding the wave of emotional turmoil, that is so atypical for her.
He’d experienced it as a vaguely warped perception. - ok, I didn't see this coming, then again we didn't have his perception just hers, and that could be anything. Bravo! :))
“Fallibility I could live with,” Severus muttered. / “And so you are going to have to live with this.” - grrrrrrrrrr and sniffs, I'm glad I'm not the only one who see Albus in this light, manipulative and cruel
Ok, the last part is so irritating, I was literally growling at my PC, so much that my hun thought I'm ready for a mental ward (after he tried to see what went wrong with my PC only to realise I'm reacting to your story XD - it was priceless).
Chapter 9
I have to say I love this chapter it is so clumsy and fluffy at the same time.
Sighing inwardly, she realised she hadn’t the faintest clue about such things. - why do I see her buried in the books on that subject in the near future? :D
In fact, all of his features were bold—but they were also elegant. - I sort of always imagined Snape to have what is called "Roman nose", I'm wondering do you see it the same way?
looking pretty miserable as it turned out. / like a baby rabbit or something. - I love it, and I'm giggling like crazy, pretty accurate descriptions in funny way :)
Surprisingly, it wasn’t completely unappetising. It was clean, after all. The issue was that it belonged to her Professor. - ermmm, after all they did she still have that particular issue? XD
Men certainly reacted when they were kicked there - I love the way your brain works :D
Her natural inclination was to move like she was on a trotting horse but it felt a bit too vertical; she needed to be more diagonal. - the touch of reality, contrary to what shady mass entertaining media aimed at male population tries to teach. Maybe you could consider to make a sort of manual I can share with large number of my female friend who opted to learn from former mentioned source. One of the reasons I love your work, you stick to reality and you have your way with words, you phrase them masterfully.
If this was what he needed, she’d do it. - ok sister, it's not what HE needs, oh well, she'll find out soon :D That is quite sleek move on his part tho, but I guess that his ego is at least a bit bruised by her constant refusal to come.
But before she could right herself, his arm was there, encircling her shoulders. And so she remained, her cheek against his chest, listening to his thundering heart and knowing that he was safe for another week. - fluff, fluff, fluff <3 I'm just melting ^_^
Now what? I fully expect her to jump up and rush or do something equally juvenile. I said I expect but I do hope for other outcome, maybe that conversation? Or maybe that she opt for him instead of books for learning ;) I'm still waiting for romance part to kicks in, but knowing how you write, that will take some time and it is going to be nerve wracking slow.
Oh yes, before I forget (as if I could!) - scratching the walls in expectation of new chapter XX
Mmmmmm, so hot. Oral first aid is a lost art. And I loved Hermione's inner monologue as she ventured into the mysterious world of fellatio. Fav line was "She peered closely at his organ. It looked back at her." I don't know why I laughed so hard at this. But I did.
You've been keeping the prose under wraps in this story, haven't you? The language has been much more clinical to match their detached and perfunctory connection. A tiny trickle seeped through with this last chapter (mixed in with Hermione's pedantic petting techniques). I'm look forward to gauging their growth by your increasingly artistic word choice. (Oh and I spotted that pitched.)
Desert! You're back!
I was crazy busy for few days and I come back to THREE new chapters? Seriously, woman you are like a machine gun... Thank You! Your holidays seem to be fast just like your writing, hopefully equally good?
Now, just quickly (I have two more chapters to read) I felt sorry for Snape, that transformation was like a slap :/ She suppose to be intelligent... surely, if he sees someone attractive, he will finish sooner? No?
If she's so unwilling -I know, there is a queue, but can I have Snape if she doesn't want him? I'm willing to wait for my turn...
Ohh and that wine? There must be something not right with it, you left like... seventeen thousand hints...
Thank you
Fox xx
OMG! OMG! OMG!!!
What did you do to my poor Snapey... I guess, he will have to tie her down next time... ;D kissing it better is simply not enough.
Very good dialogues and Draco's "It’s only a matter of time before you get what’s coming to you . . . more times than you can fucking count." -it's a seriously sinister innuendo, one, he thinks, only he understands. Good job!
So wine really wasn't good and the enchantment really was his ;) good, it makes everything so much more interesting.
Off to read another chapter
Fox xx
Ohh, my Desert, am I allowed to say it was beautiful?
It was funny, especially with 'rabbit' and 'lollipop' comments. But Hermione really redeemed herself.
Also, maybe it's just me, but I think he new what was happening around and with him. He pretended to be out of it, to not spook her and see what she's up to -at least that's what I would do. I'm Slytherin at heart.
Great chapter, she orgasmed at last, because, really, if you are having sex, why not enjoy it? It's such a waste otherwise.
Ohh and by the way, I love your chapter titles ;-)
Thank you
Waiting for more
Fox xx
Ooh I almost forgot Malfoy was bound to reappear! DS, you enjoy torturing us with cliffhangers, I swear. That being said, the pace has quickened and while it was enjoyable to have their drawn out sessions, you were right that at some stage it would become almost mechanical. Howling for the next chapter (and it was bang out of order, hurting poor Snape).