Firstly I have been very remiss in that I have not congratulated you on the brilliance of your chapter titles before now. They are terrific and totally genius. Secondly...WTF.....oh Lucius you bad bad boy. I have a soft spot for him ever since my daughter used to serve the gorgeous Mr Isaacs coffee every morning for a couple of months when he was filming up in Edinburgh. From about 6.30 am she had him all to herself for about 10 minutes as he ordered the most pretentious " feng shite" of the coffee world...lucky bitch! I'm a strong Yorkshire tea with a good dollop of milk lass and don't really get the crappy coffee fascination. Anyway I digress. I absolutely loved it when Hermione launched herself at him so as to feel her own daily consignment of Severus Sausage! Hopefully she is not vegetarian. Honestly as I was reading this I could just picture it all in my head. Your prose just made it so vivid and alive. Makes me feel as though I am getting early crimbo presents. Keep 'em coming...literally. Best wishes, Love Ali xxxx.
omg yesssssss please include lucius.
Oooh I keep imagining what would have happened if Harry had thought to check the map and walked in when SS was just drilling her and demanding she say that he is in control! After all, Snape seemed angry and why would Hermione meet with him at 10pm (and not mention it)? Curious Harry would want to know why... So many possibilities down that rabbit hole... Does he stupefy him? Before or after he comes? Run screaming for Dumbledore? Does he get Obliviated after? Do the other bottle spinning Gryffs notice? Haha sorry, I just love it! I do hope that Hermione doesn't turn into his sub... While I enjoy BDSM, I like how staunch she is in this story and personally don't want to see her give too much.
Let me know what you think after this chapter ;) - I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE it <3
“You need to grow some balls.” - ouch, she really doesn't know when to stop :D
“I . . . I want you to take control,” she murmured. / “Do . . . not . . . forget . . . this.” - double ouch! She is over her head now. You devil you!
Mmmmmm, sex in a dark room, sort of a surrogate for blind-fold. I love how this story develops. I do like dom SEV, but I was always sort of had an idea that dom is not his preference. If the premise is correct that dom people usually don't have much control in their lives and vice versa. All tho, he is somewhere in the middle, he either have too much control or too little. Then again, at that point, he has no luxury of relaxing and letting go, for that matter...
The cool wood touch her clitoris. / and clearly winning. - evil grin :D
“Thump.” Her head thudded firmly against the desk again. - hahahahahahaha, well she asked for it :D
The heat of anger, humiliation... / She stopped struggling and just gave in - this is going to hit her like a ton of rocks later on! Not to mention, what a ...pleasant (?)... way to create addiction :D
A tamed Hermione, nice! Now they will stop playing that "tug of war" game.
Well, this review is short, but my time is limited, december is always hell of a month on my work >.<.
Waiting for next chapter impatiently
Hugs&Kisses
Oh, holy fucking hell. This was so freaking hot. I'll have to go hose myself down after breakfast.
Favs and fixes--
(In all honesty, she was quite confident he’d already made it, she was struggling to draw breath after all.--Change the comma after it to an em dash.)
Something was roughly pushed into her mouth. His thumb. Trapping her tongue. Her words turned into grunts and then into silence.--Unnnnh!
A warmth fluttered against her lips. Breath. His breath. And then lips, brushing, passing by once, twice, before they held, the slightest moisture adhering to hers but still barely perceptible.--I loved this whole bit. The anticipation was palpable.
sensual acupuncturist.--:) Love this.
Only his vibration remained, a trace of potent energy that she could almost taste.--Yeeeeees. Excellent.
(The cool wood touch her clitoris.--Touched?)
his tongue going one-on-one with her clitoris—and clearly winning.--This made me laugh. And it was hot. Brilliant.
The whole head thumping on the desk bit was hilarious and infuriating. If someone did that to me, I might have to cut off his dick while he slept. (But if it was Snape/AR, and he made me come twice, I'd be lenient.)
She was being compacted--I know this was a serious moment for her, but it made me smile because it's such a great description. I have often felt compacted in certain positions, but alas, the word was not on the tip of my tongue.
And his intention was to stop her from undermining the process, to trust him to know what to do. It was entirely foreign but it was a . . . huge . . . fucking . . . relief.--I loved this whole revelation (including the parts I didn't paste). This is even more of an escape for the both of them. She gets to let go, and he gains some semblance of control (which is obviously in short supply when you're a pawn for two chess masters).
Okay. I'm ready for your curveball now. Throw it at me. (I smell a wet fish slap on the horizon.)
Oooh. Well then xD ah.. review responses.. let's see. Depends on hers or my mood, instead of it being her in the story, its a bunch of oc's she's made for each fandom I write xD for instance with FFXV, Shin dates Noct xD but Shin is also related to Gladio xD so stuff such as that. I know I sound ungrateful for having an encouraging person supporting my writing, I just.. I'm not a writer xD I'm more of a reader...But anyway xD the gigantic clit freaked me out, just a little but I still read it xD Yasssss I love Sev taking control. Hehe, he reminded me of a wraith when he was doing all the teasing foreplay xD
Thanks for writing! :D
DS,
I hereby declare that Desert_Sea has my permission to steal and use any/all of my phrases she likes, at any point from now on.
Fox ;-)
My goodness, this chapter (13) was so hot! My favourite moment was when she was standing naked in darkness... waiting -the anticipation! Plus, of course, the whole "letting go" and "giving up the control" I totally understand that...
Last night I received my first proper spanking... I cried, it was wonderful. First, I loved the sound of it, then the burn, then tingling and in the end warmth and boneless freedom. Oracle will be proud, she got me interested in spanking by her stories :-)
Funny how giving up control in one part of life, changes perspective so completely in others.
I won't forget either.
Great, great chapter (although head banging -little too much for me ;)
Fox xx
You are aware that I had to read this chapter twice aren't you? Only for the sake of research mind...and not because I am some sort of kinky, lustful pervert who can't get enough of this smut. Oh no...I'm a good lass. But my dear....engorging her clitoris....my god girl where do you get your ideas from? Not that I'm complaining...just curious is all.
BTW...not only did my computer burst into flames at all this hot rudery (is that a word?) but I myself actually spontaneously combusted and am now a pile of ash sitting on my chair. I do hope Sev uses me as some floo powder.
Best wishes, Love Ali xxxx.......honestly great stuff and I sort of got the chapter right!
i hope she gets pregnant and I hope no one overheard this... that would be awkward.
Yay! I love how fast you update, it is greatly appreciated and noticed. This chapter was great, I love how you have a balance between story building character development and just straight up hot smut. I hope to get some insight into what Snape is feeling in the next chapter after he lost his control by taking control of Hermione. As always, I can't wait till the next update!