New chapter! It really brightened my day :)
And lighting a cigarette with a finger...what a show off. All tho I would probably place a zippo in his hands (don't get me wrong I love the way you described the scene, this is my personal quirk). I imagine he has lovely thin hands with long fingers, in those hands zippo could be...hmmm.
Poor Hermione - she really doesn't know in what she is getting in? She does have that need to rescue everyone, even from themselves, especially if they don't want to be rescued, just so she can place them ih her little perfect world. But at the end you perfectly captured her, she will sleep with him to save him - yeah right! What a sacrifice! (sorry for the sarcasm that side of her was always been bit annerving)
I am not surprised that he is on a suicide mission. He is on self destructive part since chapter 1. So that much was obvious to me. But I do hope to see what is going to happen next, and how "miss little perfect" is going to meddle in :D
Oh, I love how you introduce his life story, one of the appeal of Snape's character is that you have to peace his story through the cannon books. Glad to see I'm not the only one who gave a great deal of thought to his background.
Can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^
This is a complete tease chapter!!! I am really enjoying this story and please keep up the great descriptidescriptons of the naughty scenes.
💘- Becca
Such a great chapter. Holy fuck, I did not see the self-sacrificing Snape angle coming at all. How totally fucked up (while satisfying your reader's need for a heroic Snape). Sneaky sneaky girl. I forgot to say in the other chapters how I liked your integration of Snape's smoking as it's a great AR real life crossover. (Although he quit later and hated having to smoke for parts.) But now you've discussed it more in this chapter and enhanced it so well with the background story that I finally remembered to mention it.
I'm freaked out now about the dark beasts and what they're walking into (not just because of the suicide mission he's decided on). No wonder he's so worried about her.
And that bit about her fitting inside the sheep made me laugh. It was the first thing I thought of when they found it. I think I was having a Star Wars Tauntaun belly flashback.
My favorite parts were the foot nudges. What can I say? I'm a sucker for heart-skipping moments of intimacy. In the 6th grade I used to play footsie with the guy across from me (hey, he started it), and it made my stomach flip every time.
I also loved the build up to the kissing. So fucking sweet. (But you suckered me in the the fingers on the lips.)
She's awfully sure she's going to need that potion. I, however, am not so sure. Everybody has a past; she's always known what his was, and she still wanted him. Snape on the other hand might get all noble on her in the harsh light of sobriety. You never know with him.
(Corrections: These three sentences are all the same--you need to separate the question from the statement with a comma.
"You are a glutton for punishment aren’t you?”
“It’s true though isn’t it?”
You just can’t help but interfere can you?
And the following one is a comma splice. I'd change it into two separate sentences (or change it to a semicolon or an em dash).
He couldn’t help smirking, it sounded like a proclamation by the Queen.
And when you have ellipses right before a quotation mark, don't put a space between the last dot and the quotation mark (that will also fix the directionality problem that makes it look like the quotation marks are aiming the wrong way).
to suggest that I could look better than . . . you . . . “)
Oh, and forgot to say "saccades"--Word Notebook! Yeeeeeees. I've never heard this before. Excellent new word porn. Mmmmmm.
You can squeeze out one more chapter before you go, can't you? :D I'm going to be all Debaucery deficient over the weekend. 8,P <---Debaucery face w/ withdrawal tear.
I just LOVE it, simply love it, hanging on every new chapter like a drowning person on lifesaver.
Snape is so wonderfully screwed up and you made him sound sexy as hell (not that he needs it in my book). I hope there will be new chapter soon ^_^
Just found this story, and ohhhhh my goooood! You keep writing like that and I'll have to whip your butt for more! Or maybe you'd like that? It sounds like Hermione needs it, for sure! I shouldn't, talk, I'm so way overdue on my fics it isn't even funny. But hey, us authors have to stick together, eh? Hermione sure seems to have a load of issues she's never dealt with and needs to face. Snape has his demons, but Hermione seems more out of touch with hers than he does. At least he knows what he's hiding from. What's her excuse?
Mmmmmm, waterfall Snape. Very tasty. And pronounced. (By the way, bathing in boxers is cheating.) 8P
And now Luna comes to the rescue. You know how much I love Luna. I also love a sexually frustrated Hermione who can't pack her tent. I was snorting the whole time she was trying to shrink her shit. Hopefully Luna's advice will spark a change between Hermione and Severus and they'll (at least) open up a little more. Or maybe they'll just keep spying on each other in the buff. Whatever works. :)
Oh, and lavishaggadelic made me laugh. Excellent word coitus.
I hope Hermione comes soon so she does bust a blood vessel from all the pent up stress. Free the clit!
Ch. 9 - loved the discussion H. and G. had. Very eye-opening and 'true' to H.'s character. The introductio of an Amory Potion is a great plot device - this could be used in many ways to shape this story and although I've a few ideas I as a faithful reader of your tale will leave this to you. I particularly in this chapter enjoyed the stark differences showcased between G. and H. further highlighting her role as a 'calming' and 'virtuous' influence in S.'s grounding. Now, I'd be cautious with my use of 'grounding' however you've painted an overbose image of a sinful and unrepentant S. thus far, and a little guidance back to his true self is necessary. I defintely don't believe that the S. you've created is the 'real' S. and H., due to their vast differences (@thismoment) will help him discover who this is (I actually don't think, based on his working for multiple Masters he has ever had the opportunity to find himself - Oh how I want him to find himself! W/ H. ofcourse - ever the true romantic... XD).
Kudos also on the heartfelt conversation b/w A. and S. as this connects well w/ my understanding that S. is lost. So far! Thumbs-freaking-up! Bring on the field trip.
Ch. 10 - Firstly, I must applaud you on your creation of character consistency. S. and H. are as they were in the first chapters, there's nothing worse than when the characters are so suddenly OOC... this is just perfect. There are obviously minor changes, but this is due to 'external' factors, such as H.'s genuine concern (H.'s awareness of S. and his lack of food). Internal shifts in character imho need to take place over time, due to extrinsic influences. This is pacing itself every well!
Secondly, witness firsthand S.'s capabilities and just being able to enjoy S. in his element fills me with glee! Definitely a man worth saving. I'm a little concerned about the Amory Potion though - H. has no real interest in S. @ this time... what would be her incentive in taking it? Especially since she is fully aware of what the consequences could well be... So much could happen... w/ or w/o the Amory Potion. I am sure though that it is nothing H. would enter into w/o a good and real reason. I'm sure you've some idea - I am keen to see where S. and H. go from here.
I really liked this chapter (and I'm not entirely sure why). It had a little bit of everything in it (maybe that's why): bad boy Snape, humorous internal dialogue, mystery, feels, ass ogling.
Which brings me to my first fav line: so positioning herself directly behind his hypnotic arse was not a good idea.
Hahahahaha! It was a brilliant idea.
My favorite part was Hermione climbing the tree. It wasn't just the pussy clamp rescue maneuver (which I know is The Claw's tamer cousin), it was the cranial foothold that had me cackling. Excellent.
And now there's a dragon (?) mystery as well. I can't wait to see where you take this.
Snape actually adimitted that he has a problem. That's a step in the right direction. If he didn't aknowledge it, there would be no progress at all. It will be a struggle for him to pull himself out of the humongous hole he has dug himself in. There will be temptation everywhere.
Yay catfight! So hoping to see a catfight in a chapter one day. If I was in the Wizarding world, I would be putting bets on the catfights. And eating popcorn and enjoying the fight. (Especially at the Ministry. Sure to spice up a slow workday.)
Since Snape said himself he wasn't used to female company before the conculsion of the the 2nd war, he probably doesn't know to be careful who you screw and where. They may come back to haunt you in the future. Women can be vicious when they're angry!
Love the story. Looking forward to the next chapter~
This is an awesome story and well written. The one thing I didn't like was how OOC Hermione was when the troll showed up. No way she wouldn't have jumped up and fought and then for her to ask how she could help instead of starting to heal him? I just hope she is a little more of the smart and action-based herione we all know and love in the future.
Also, it's all SO SEXY! Can't wait for more. :)