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for Tango *Complete*

by Desert_Sea

person Anonymous
schedule July 5, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Okay, yes you managed to resolve the unresolved here :) And I dare say, rather well at that. Now I, of course, would like to read how this continues. It seems, after all, that both don't wish to leave it at a one-night kind of affair. Then again, if you want to encourage us - your faithful readers - to let our own imagination come into play and decide how to continue this little tale, that is also fine. So far it ends on a positive note, but does leave room for more developements. As for me, I always like to read more of what you write, so please do feel free to continue expanding this one- (now two-) shot.

Anyway, this was again a chapter with very rich imagery. I also like, how you showed Hermione's thougt process again - humorous as ever.

Thank you for another wonderful chapter to read!

LeWyKi

schedule July 4, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Decidely yummy!! I loved this addition and I think they aren't yet done. ;-)  Thank you once again, HG4eva

person Anonymous
schedule July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Wonderfully done. I was happy with the way the first bit ended, but this is a marvelous continuation. Please, please keep going! Want more! - Mewtynt
schedule July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Holy sheep shit. This was so effing hot. You're killin me! I don't want to turn into a psycho and C&P the whole story back to you (cough cough cough), but there was so much I liked in this I'm sure I didn't get it all. (I do get distracted in the heat of the moment.)

Extol
Irretrievable 
Sufficient
Cantankerous
elucidate
Unfettered--word notebook goodness.

"...returning them to her wrapped in more excruciating layers of enigma"--Like Snape candy. Mmmmmm. Creamy center. (I smell Snape and candy.)

"the dungeons would be brass monkey cold."--Snort. Love this.

"or she would be taking it to her room and doing unmentionable things to it." Steal it, steal it, steal it! Two votes for unmentionable coat coitus.

"she was positive her clitoris would enjoy the opportunity to admire its reflection in each and every one of them."--You're going to love my next one-shot. (I might have it up soon. It still needs a few more rereadings.)

Pitch darkness--Pitchy :)

"And thisss,” he whispered, his long fingers curling over her mons."--Holy fuck yes.

"Have you brought this for me?” he murmured, tapping his fingertips against the flesh of her labia."--And more.

(If he wanted straight talking he would get it.--comma after talking.)

"pressing the other against her labia, pulling her possessively into him."--Oh my god! How am I supposed to get anything done when I'm stuck to the chair?

"and fizzing into her scalp."--Fizzing=perfect.

"levered apart her labia,"--Mmmmmm. Love this.

"her G-string floss like a fan-belt against her throbbing clitoris."--Hahahaha. This is great.

"Now cross your arms and keep frowning.” Bwhahahaha! This was utter perfection. Cross Snape is a sexy Snape.

"veiled cock jutting into her face."--Love this.

"singing faintly against her palm."--Excellent.

(She loved that she responsible for doing it to him.-- that she was responsible.)

"The tight expletive tore from somewhere throaty and raw and she knew he was close."--The tension in the description is perfect.

Damn you! Of course I want another installment! You purposely left this cliff-like so you'd have an excuse to keep writing, didn't you? You know everybody's going to be begging for more. You can't trick me. No reward story until you take a break.

person Anonymous
schedule July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM

More!!!

person RyuaAlba
schedule July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Well, my goodness. Normally I avoid Hermione stuff like the plague. Overexposure, you see. But this is one of the pairings I enjoy terribly much.

This was very hot. Dance scenes are often very awkward in writing, but you did a lovely job. Focusing on the eroticism and Hermione's sensations rather than exactly what they were doing was definitely the right choice.

And that second chapter was absolutely delightful. Exactly the kind of sex scene I like to read. Intelligent people, both attracted to each other's mind even more than bodies, both of them EXTREMELY into what they are doing. And they managed to stay in character (or at least as much as they can in porn), which is one of my favourite things to see. Very sexy, very nicely written.

person Anonymous
schedule July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Oh hey look, new review font. But uhm back to the task at hand

 

I WOULD LOVE MORE SMUT and more story though the Throne of Glass series has been stabbing my feels relentlessly, some fluff or happy endings would be lovely!

person Anonymous
schedule July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Yes you did the second part! Awesome!

I still love the first part the best of all your stories (ok I am actually only halfway yet)

all the best,

one of your anons

person Anonymous
schedule July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM
OMG Loved part II so much I'm at a loss for words!! Please tell me there is still lots of unfinished business between them.  You've written them to be perfect and complete together!! That was so sexy and hot hot hot!!
person Anonymous
schedule July 2, 2016 at 12:00 AM

No woman in her right mind could let a man like that just walk away! She has to know quality men aren't easy to come by. After all she did date Ron Weasley. She has to go after him! 

Also I noticed the nod to In Demand which made me happy and sad at the same time. 'sigh'  I'm still getting over it.

I do hope you continue this story or at least have some other stories in the works.

Lin