This was a lovely ending. You tied up the emotional loose ends and wound up making it something very sweet. I especially love the way you used the dick-sucking scenes to convey a sense of acceptance (which you also did in ITH), but you also used it as a launch pad for his loss of control. Physical release to instigate the emotional release.
And, mmmmm, perhaps I need to procure a panther. I could do with some supple muscle between my thighs.
Fav parts:
The whole opening dream scene
(collarbone is one word)
"snaking it under the lower curve of his bottom lip, scooping it between her teeth and tugging gently. He didn’t try to stop her, his lips loose and accommodating"--I dig the description. Hot.
"enjoying having to chase his cock as it slid over his pelvis."--There aren't nearly enough cock chases in stories. I adored this.
deliquescent--Mmmmmm, word notebook.
("Severus, you know I’m coming back don’t you?”-- Comma after back.)
I love how Snape is getting out of social engagements with his doppelgänger.
"Doppelgäng-banger potion"--Hahahahaha!
I like their continued used of the Severi. I could do with a Severi Sandwich.
I also noticed this contained your first proposal scene between these two. I think I'm partial to this one because I like black opals. Very sweet and funny.
I somehow screwed up my C&P again and lost another fav, so I'm one short. Maybe I'll find it next time I read this. I feel like I should say more about how much I liked this story, but I'm short on time and can't do it justice. (Or maybe my brain is melted from rewriting.) As always, I look forward to whatever you come up with next, and I'm sure I'll return to this for inspiration in the coming months. Until next time <3
whwre is everyone else at this point when they are doing the tango and its getting sexual??
i thought they were going to have sex :-(
SHOULDNT THEY BE USING CONTRACEPTION SO HE DOESNT GET HER PREGNANT?? UNLESS THATS WHAT HE WANTS TO HAPPEN WITH HER !!! ??
Question: this is confusing he fucked other students (i mean apart from Hermione) and used the oil on other students he fucked (i mean apart from Hermione) or he gave it to students to use on themselfs or on other students after they fucked other students??
Quote: Taking a deep breath, he reached into one of the desk drawers, retrieving the bottle of oil that he used as the base for certain potions, to season the chopping boards and, as it turned out, to rub into the rump of certain students that happened to drop by and were keen for an all-night fuck-a-thon.
I vote yes for an epilogue!
UH YES EPILOGUE!
Isn't it amazing when a one shot is written that it continues into MORE.
Starting to enjoy the word MORE.
Please continue....
When the husband has a moment will have him read your story. It is AMAZING
Oh almost forgot THANK YOU
Realized I didn't sign my last review.
I'm going to read the rest of your stories.
What order would you like them read?
Always like the input from the author.
Waiting for the epilogue of Tango and the list of your other stories.
Sincerely,
pickles87
Holy hell! Two Severuses?! Egads! I loved the line about it being the possible last orgasm of her life because yes, that might just about kill her with pleasure. lol Yum, yum, yum!! Not an elegant description, but how I feel right now. lol Thank you, hon!! HG4eva
First off, "Maybe someone who doesn’t release their stories until they are completely finished?"
--Bahahahaha! Trust me, I'm doing that for everyone's benefit. And it's not teasing if I haven't started anything. (Plus then the next story won't take so long because I'll be able to work on a new one while I'm posting the other.) And you know that reward story will never be earned. Maybe I can get it done for you for Christmas or something. (But only if you release GS from all hostage situations.)
This chapter was excellent. Two Snapes are always better than one. The snakes freaked me the fuck out, but I can roll with it. They were handy in terms of positioning. And I liked the edgy quality they added to the scene.
I lost one of my favorite bits (and I'm too lazy to go find it again), so here's the rest of my favs.
"She hadn’t known him any deeper than she would a performer, or an actor, one whom controls everything that is known of him, manufactures every perception."--I love this. It might be my fav of the favorites. (I think it's who not whom in this instance by the way.) I love this comparison and what it says about him.
"Bits were sticking out like the wires of a broken appliance"--Great image.
(and she only just managed to stop herself form lunging into them.--from lunging)
"His cock also seemed to be making preparations, no longer lounging in insouciant indifference but jutting forward, eager and attentive."--Mmmmm, preparedness is hot. I also like the idea of insouciant cocks.
"rising to rigid attention like he was preparing for a shoot-out—pistols at dawn—although sunrise was a few hours away."--Hahahaha! Perfection.
" punch drunk "--This was my favorite phrase this chapter.
"exuberant streams"--Exuberant made me love this.
Epilogue? As long as it's a smut-fest. Or incredibly touching. They need each other. I can't wait to see how you wrap this up.