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So hot! Fanning myself over here!

Meow.... Jummy... Sry I'm rather lot for words here... Deliciously dominat Sanpe is one of my favourites. Mymy why did clever Mione start trying to use alc for reliev? She should know better... It nubs only as Long as you are REALY intoxicated. Can't wait to read more about those two. Btw, I rather like your using of the same title in different languages as chapter names^^

Holy shit this was hot. And hilarious. I'm saying that every single chapter, but I don't know what else to say. It's true. I'm loving this story. I thought the writing was particularly good this chapter, but that's true every chapter too. I wish I could give you some magical new feedback, but I've got nothing. "easily have come from a meeting between his crotch and the gaze of a basilisk."--Oh my God. This was so good. (You’ll Scourgify will you?--Comma before will you.) "but Hermione could feel the presence of his cock behind her, like a shadow cast against her bare buttocks."--I loved this. So much. "She’d never heard of a sympathy hard-on before but it was possible."--I don't know why I liked this, but I did. Although, I've never had a sympathy wetty. "electrostatic attraction"--Yeeeeees. "like she’d just indulged in a decidedly infelicitous foursome with Fluffy the three headed dog." Loved this example (and I think three-headed should be hyphenated). "she might require some sort of jaw relocating incantation"--Bahahahahaha! "to reveal the ladle of all ladles"--Martha Stewart is missing out on a cash gold mine. And now you've left us with a sexual cliffhanger. Maybe that's why I loved this chapter so much--it was scorching but left me with so much to anticipate. Excellent.

I absolutely loved chapter 9. I've been looking almost twice a day for this chapter to post. I had to play catchup when I saw you had posted another story. I knew it was going to be great as he was rolling his sleeve up in chapter 8 and you did not disappoint. I love a good spanking from Severus. Can't wait to read more! Thank you for such great work. It's plot with a perfect amount of smutty goodness. I'm still trying to figure out Severus' motive for "accidentally" having the book destroyed. I know it was for Hermione' s benefit...I just can't fit it together. That's why you are writing though! Need more...but waiting patiently.

This was incredibly hot. The spanking was the perfect foreplay for the finger fuck finale. And my word clit was delightfully plundered by your prose. All in all, very satisfying. Notable lines this time "short, sharp visitations from his prodigious palm"--I just liked the way you worded this. The pubic hair fluffing cracked me up. "Could he play her cheeks like the bongos?"--DaaaaaayOh! Daa-a-a-ay Oh. He most definitely can. Calypso canings are next. "Now that she’d been comprehensively tenderised on the outside, she was more than ready to be tenderised on the inside."--Loved this. I was going to say I could do with some tenderizing myself, but then I remembered the bruise on my leg and realized I'd already begun. Punching yourself in the leg isn't nearly as nice as a Snape spanking. "He couldn’t do it through her eyes so he was going to be killing her softly with his adjectives. Fuckity Fuck!"--Now I can't stop humming Killing me Softly. And I used to say fuckity fuck when I was younger. Actually it was a quick string of fuck fuck fuckity fuck. I liked to be thorough. "If she did actually die she could imagine him defibrillating her in this exact position"--I loved this so much. I need some debauched defibrillation in my life. “Lubricious is a word I’m rather taken with,” he said, sliding one long digit around the slippery entrance to her pussy. She squeezed her eyes shut tighter. Of course, there would be so many opportunities to use it in conversation."--Hahahahaha! Definitely a word that should be part of the daily lexicon. A satisfying day begins and ends with lubricious. I loved the whole part where he wrote-talked to her while he fingered her. Blisteringly hot. And I'm dying to find out what she's going to test out with him next. So many orifices so little time.

For someone who's not into spanking, you sure are slap happy these last couple stories. Or were you just doing this one for me? Because I'm certainly not complaining. I enjoyed this whole chapter. I like the inner workings of Hermione's mind. Very relatable--and funny. And I liked Snape's detox tin. Poignant and thoughtful. I got a lot of words for my "favorite words" notebook: Turbid Immaculate Mounting rage Appraised Vacillated Subterfuge Anemic Incursions And my favorite lines this time were "I just thought that when you start being too much of a cunt, as is clearly inevitable, you might want to take it.’"--This was hilariously excellent. "which had been squirming like maggoty haggis"--Perfect, visceral description. "veins like rivers coursing over them"--Words and visuals. Love it. "All that stirring. And chopping. And fingering."--Hahahaha! I'm surprised I don't look like Popeye the Sailor Man by now. Looking forward to that next spanking new chapter. I can think of lots of things she might need first hand research to clarify. All for the sake of the book of course.

Oh my GOD! You are killing me. This was so good. And now I feel like a monkey-brained idiot who can't string two sentences together. Snape's extra-credit writing was fucking fantastic. It might be the best thing I've read in years (definitely the best thing I've read in fanfiction). I won't copy and paste the whole thing back to you even though it deserves it. I'm going to have to go back and read it again just to satisfy my word-clit (which is in my brain and not subject to bruising or overuse, so it's safe to liberally partake). Other parts I enjoyed "then crapped in her mouth"--Hahahaha! "her breath came straight from a troll’s bottom, and her stomach kept threatening to cover the delicious fabric in what she could only describe as 'essence of rancid ginger.'"--Excellent description. "I find it difficult to believe there could be anything I need to hear more urgently than the previous enthralling tale.”--Snort. I actually liked the whole confession. Cuntliness should be an official assessment. Now we're left with the mystery of the "not biscuit" tin. I have absolutely no guess as to what it could be. Unless he's got the blown up bits of the book in there for charred reference.

I liked this^^

Oh, that is the funniest chapter yet (if a little sad, considering Hermione's situation). I suspect Snape is enough of a gentleman not to take advantage physically, but there is no way he won't be using this against her - and help her with her drinking problem? He might be amused by a drunk and aroused Hermione, but her drinking obviously discomforts him. Please, please let them turn up a copy of the original dry-as-bones discourse before the end and decide to publish their own (well researched) work under pseudonyms (although I have some suspicions about Snape and that book that go beyond letting his students getting a glimpse of the cover)

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