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Glutton for punishment? To me, it seems more like the natural progression of things on my way to becoming a scientist. After all, I do love learning and understanding just about anything (if you do not count economy or politics). Where I live, studies always used to take five years to complete, with both basic and specific knowledge to be learned. It has only been a few years, since the BA/MA scheme has been introduced and adopted here and some studies like medicine, pharmacy or becoming a teacher still take the whole five (or more) years without the BA/MA separation. On to the story: Okay, that was one lovely chapter. Even made me laugh at times :) - your vivid descriptive language is hilarious in places, as are Hermiones "pep talks to her various body parts". And there he goes again, with the hand on cheek - wonder how long it will be, until she actually asks about it - seems like a reluctant goodbye, but is it? One more question: Now what? Well. Theoretically, she will now go home, start (over)thinking again, fall asleep sometime along the way and wake up to a delivery of the remaining pages for the book - by hand or by owl, I wonder?. Next, she'll have to make all the material into one real-looking book and then, in the evening, would be their last meeting out of necessity: to hand in the book. All in all, one day left where they will have to meet at some point and might establish further meetings - perhaps a celebration afterwards? A lot more might happen during that day. What have you planned for us? I guess there will be a chance to read about it, soon enough :)

I looked it up--tailed off and trailed off mean the same thing. I'd just never heard it before. (Ignorance for the win.) "LOL! I love the cheer squad."--Did I ever tell you that I used to be a cheerleader? For two years. I never yelled for anyone to thrust into a smirk, but that sounds far more entertaining. (Or maybe I was just cheering for the wrong event.) "I know someone who could fix that for you – he might be able to fix a few other things too" Are you referring to your brother? Is he an EKG specialist? (I don't recall you telling me what he does.) And I told you, I don't do beards. (Plus I don't think his tongue would reach this far.) And you should definitely watch The Sandlot. I don't know if it's your taste, but it's sweet and funny and worth seeing. "It sounds like a Hannibal Lecter meal – with some fava beans and a nice chianti (you’ll have to finish the final bit, I can’t spell it)."--Hahahahaha! I guess that would be Ft-ft-ft-ft-ft-ft. "to instantly feel her bare skin being flayed by the heat of his predatory gaze"--Yeeees! Flayed. "but were also shit-scared and trying their best not to tremble against his billowing breast."--I think I liked the sudden blunt honesty of shit-scared amongst all the pretty prose. "elicited a guttural groan dredged up from somewhere around his bollocks,"--Love this. All groans should come from the balls. "closing her eyes as his unyielding measure seared between her lips, grinding her clitoris like a pestle of flesh."--I don't know if I liked "unyielding measure" better or "pestle of flesh." (She sucked at he plunged--as he plunged?) "Colossus of Cocks"--Eighth wonder of the world. (her head pitching back against him--I spy.) (but knew he was probably only half way or less--halfway is one word.) "twat not to get too excited with the interior re-design"--Hahahahaha! I need some redecorating myself. I'll have to rent a jackhammer. "And then he redefined what happiness was. One thing she realised about a massive cock was that it didn’t leave a lot to the imagination. It was all there, every bump and ridge, reaming against her walls. And it felt fucking incredible."--I love all of this. "internal termination point of each beautifully timed swing of his hips."--I think I liked the description of swing of his hips. Visual and visceral. "she felt her innards about to capsize"--Capsize. Yessss. I used this in Q (not the way you did). (BTW, I forgot to tell you, guess what I found in chapter 37. Fuck fuck fuckity fuck. I read it maybe two days after we'd talked about it and cracked up when I saw it.) "His voice felt so close, almost cosseted in the chamber of her ear."--Mmmmmm, cosseted. "to fuck her even more comprehensively than she’d hoped"--All fucking should be comprehensive. I love that. "relentlessly peppered with the stinging spray."--Peppered made stinging spray even better. I still have no idea what's going on in this story. Does Snape think she's just doing all this for the book? What is going on? Don't answer that (except with another chapter). Looking forward to whatever you've got coming next (no pun intended).

Really, really enjoyed the last two chapters. Can't believe the pace you're cranking these out at, though I'm not complaining!

Hey there - that one was fast (again, not sure why that still surprises me :) Thanks, and a good average was necessary for my application (currently working on that) for the MA studies, so yes, I was somewhat relieved. The experiment did turn out to be some fun. The results also managed to practically reverse my initial hypothesis, but that just means the topic bears further exploring...anyway, on to the story: No, so far, your settings haven't been predictable. I am just always surprised to read HP-stories with little to no magic in their setting - the literal kind, that is ;) As for my summary - it just illustrates my personal development over the last few months: Working out the key points of whatever material and extrapolating from there on has become entirely too common for me. After finishing my own, I am now helping my youngest brother with a report of his and another friend in writing her thesis...well. And no, it is not your stories, that are predictable - rather these are the parts that stories seem to be made up of in general. What makes a story good or annoying is how the author chooses to fill these parts with content, language - their own personal brand of storytelling. And I simply like your style of writing quite a lot. This pairing may have some influence, but others like it (take Pride and Prejudice or Emma, for example) make for the most interesting dynamics, generally. Thus, they are really worth reading. Or something. That is just my own personal opinion. A little (or a lot) conflict, some chemistry and you will certainly see if the couple suits. I remember some comedian saying once "Dinner dates are such a useless practice - after all, what do you learn of your date? Their eating habits or that they are able to use cutlery appropriately? If you truly wish to get to know each other, simply meet to purposefully drive right into a large traffic jam and see how each of you deals with stressful situations" Fitting, I believe...ahhh, off topic again. On to the new chapter: Firstly, something formal - One thing I noticed is, that you have (by accident, I think) tripled "had" somewhere in the middle..."he’d had had a difficult and traumatic life"... I do believe that is one "had" too many ;) And secondly, for the content - The intrigue is back - greetings, old friend! Once free of outward influences that brain of hers has taken up its rapid and plentiful work again. Too bad, the conclusions she might come to are not necessarily correct. Still, having realized her own interest in his person(ality) and that actively taking up the role of the brave little lioness is a nice development. And the reward for bravery... somehow I don't think there will be any complaints about that point:) And what have we there in the end? Another mystery? Telepathy? You certainly manage to keep a reader wondering. Now, I'd say that is enough chatter, for now. Happy writing (and working breaks) for you!

Holy. Fucking. Hell. This chapter was beyond good. I am swimming in words. And I think my heart's going to pound out of my chest. I was way too wrapped up in this; I felt like everything was happening to me. From a writing stance I think that's outstanding; from an adrenal sense, I need to calm the fuck down. Everything is getting deeper; and I love it. In fact, most of my favorite parts this time were chosen because of how they sucked me into the experience and made me feel. "She still couldn’t get used to the idea of calling him by his first name so it seemed a little bizarre for the space beside her to feel so empty."--I love this. The heart-tugging loneliness is contrasted wonderfully with her discomfort with calling him by his first name. "And the passion with which he wrote made her believe that his romantic notions hailed from a deep place, somewhere genuine and, ultimately, vulnerable despite the sexual confidence that he seemed to possess."--Fuuuuuuck. This is so beautiful. I don't know what else to say. (She admonished herself from being fucking ridiculous but it didn’t stop her from feeling miserable.--That from should be for.) "Dredging up a breath from the soles of her feet"--Excellent. "The frown that sliced through his brow was made all the more severe by the shadow of the dungeons"--I love the visual this conjures, and sliced was the perfect verb. "feel the crimson flush rolling up her throat." Again, you made a simple image so much better with one word: rolling. ("female perspective on . . . “ she tailed off."--Did you mean trailed off?) "the way she would have liked to ‘proceed’ was by thrusting her tongue into the vague smirk on his lips"--Do it, do it, do it! Thrusting into a vague smirk sounds delicious. "Then she placed his palm against her cheek, her eyes not wavering from his despite her roiling heart."--Aaaaaaand my heart palpitations just blew up the EKG. "tilting her head back until she could feel his teeth bared at the curve of her jaw."--You're killin' me, Smalls. (Sorry, I was watching The Sandlot yesterday.) "a welcome plume of steam rising from behind the frosted glass door."--Love this visual. It's almost tactile. "He wants you to get your gear off, ‘Mione. Yes, I worked that out myself actually, thank you very much."--Snort. I love Hermione's inner monologue. "he guided her backwards until the rigid column in his trousers was firmly ensconced between her denim-clad buttocks"--Ensconced. Yessssss. And now I need to go back into some furniture and reenact this. "extruded each nipple"--Extruded made me love this. "And we supped upon her sweet nectar, avaricious and awash with desire"--Dammit. Word pimp Snape knows just how to hit my word clit just right. Avaricious almost sent me over the edge. (It took a moment for his words to sink in before she suddenly wihtdrew and turned her face to his. --Withdrew.) (that of his cock which was still embedded in her backside.--Comma before which.) And now I suspect that he's hearing her thoughts. Is she hearing his? Is he really saying the "prose" out loud? Don't tell me! What is going on? Don't tell me that either! Oh, and I almost forgot your A/N. "I keep thinking I see members on the street."--I keep thinking I see them between my thighs. Much more entertaining. "This makes me think we should write something together . . . what do you think?"--I think it's brilliant. You're not too busy, are you? I know you have lots of prostate hyperplasia on your plate. (And paramedic pythons to wrangle.) :)

Wow, is that another story? I'd say you've been a very diligent writer, these last few months :-) Me too - only, I had to. Having - finally! - finished my bachelor degree last week and fortunately with an A in average, I am now back to reading...and other unimportant stuff like work etc. And well, first you finished "In their Hands" and now another shift to an entirely new Snape and Hermione. Not that it seems entirely impossible, but for me it is a rather unexpected setting. Anyway, as with your other stories, so far it has been very much worth reading and somehow I managed to get on it right when you've reached a (seemingly) crucial point in your tale. Well, it is interesting to read something, that is already about half or more (if I am not mistaken) complete. Sooo, now that we 1)got to know the main characters' current situations 2) introduced a starting conflict 3) uncovered some of their life's history and mysteries and 4) tentatively began heading in the "feeling" and "emotional" direction, with the two starting to relate to each other...what is there to come? A book to be finished, some steps toward a personal relationship to be taken - perhaps, considering who the main actors are, a few conflicts and a pinch of miscommunication added - all towards a better understanding of each other...or something. Let us say, I'm anticipating any and all new chapters ;-)

Really loved the latest chapter! Laughed so hard at the term "pussyquake" XP

Fucking hell, that was a good chapter. Superb writing and descriptions. My pussy is so jealous. "murky mire where all of her worst memories festered like infected sores"--Alliteration and similes, and festered. Oh my. "fetid exhumation"--Love this. "Do you plan to continue in absentia?"--Hahahaha! "listing along on his warm waves"--This is great. It not only creates a tactile visual, it sets the mood. "Famous. Last. Words."--Snort. I hope those are my last words. "compelling cock"--Lots of excellent alliteration in the chapter, but this was one of my favorites. "beyond grasping the base of his shaft before moaning into it like bad karaoke."--Bahahahaha! That's my kind of "Top 10." "all she could execute were a few slow pumps of the velvety skin encasing his smoking hot rod."--I'm not sure what I like about this. It could be the word execute. Or it could be encasing or velvety. But I suspect it's the smoking hot rod, which made me laugh. "howling clitoris"--Fuck! I love this. "Finished? Did he mean dead?"--Snort! What a way to go. "Was it some secret handshake from a clandestine fingering society?" --The Illuminaughty. "bastion of invincibility."--He likes the cock karaoke too. "trifecta of incredible orgasms to placate her"--I'm a triple crown winner myself. "that she’d managed to pioneer the new sixty-one sex position, where one person does all the work and the other lies there like a fucking plank."--Damn straight. This needs to be a real thing. Sometimes concentration is out of the question. "Finally lifting her face from where she’d been blow drying his groin" Hahahahaha! Excellent. (And blow-dry is hyphenated.) "incontrovertibly commanding cock--I don't know if I liked the incontrovertible or the commanding cock alliteration best, but together they were excellent. "And she would call back, her mouth full of a decidedly saliva-logged cock, ‘I’m still working on it!’"--Bwhahahaha! "except apparently a sex God when he’s not wandering around the classroom sneering at people’s potions"--Snort, snort snort. The sneering is a bonus. (On a one way journey to ‘death by orgasm.’--One-way is hyphenated.) "she sent the other down to consult with his balls. Even they seemed ridiculously large. She hoped it didn’t mean she was going to cop a firehose of semen if it ever did finally arrive."--Consult was great, and obviously I loved "cop a firehose of semen." "corpulent clit"--I love the word corpulent, but now you've made me love it even more. Alliteration at its finest. "and when he attempted a pair, she wondered if in fact his entire arm had been recruited for the job."--Hahaha! Swelling makes everything more fun. "It was less than ideal lubrication but it was all she could manage at short notice without dipping into her own twat which happened to be filled beyond capacity at that moment."--I'm sure he'd share. Sharing is caring. (There should be a comma between twat and which.) "You are mine, Professor of Finger Fucking."--I got my Masters in Finger Fucking. It's a double-penetration major. "gratuitous gushes"--Love this. And I loved how he suddenly whipped out the narrative and cock-slapped her in the face with it. Sneaky word pimp. Noooooo, don't go, Snape! Come back! Does he really have a meeting or is he just running away? What the fuck! How much longer until we find out why he blew up the book? I'm dying here.

Chapter 10: finally got around to reading this and glad I did! This is pretty much how I envisioned him. Fantastic writing so far, please update soon!

WOW!!!! I read all ten chapters in one flippin go!!! ha ha, the idea of Snape and Hermione collaborating on a sex book ... hee hee - this was hot I found myself not being able to breathe at one point.