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Crikey this just got real!! Heck talk about thickenin the plot!! Can't wait for the next hit - and I say hit because your updates are absolutely addictive!

Dang it...I shouldn't have read that before breakfast. It was wonderful but horrible at the same time. That is a delicious twist but Severus is hurting just as much if not more than Hermione. He remembers that event and more everyday. I just want to kiss away his tears. You are such a strong writer in how you communicate emotion. I still love it but don't keep me waiting long for that ending. Thanks for the congrats!

Oh my God! I did not see that coming at all. Holy fuck. Snape better not fucking go anywhere. Her pushing him away is what got them into this mess. Now I'm dying to know what's going to happen between them (and wondering if Hermione is going to go castrate Whiffle). Also wondering who her father really is. (I thought for sure you were going to say it was Voldemort, but then I thought it would be way more fucked up if it was Snape - even though I know that's not where you're going with this story. I'm just depraved like that.) (he whispered, before sniffing loudly.--Take out the comma.) (He was quiet a long time, eventually his breathing became less ragged.--Comma splice. I'd put an "and" after the comma or use a semicolon.) "One year. Twelve days.”--Fuck. Four word dagger to the heart. I love that you conveyed so much in two two-word sentences. (Severus looked forlorn as though he didn’t quite understand it either.--Put a comma after forlorn. ) (So why are we lying here together now.--Question mark. I'm so glad I'm not the only one who does this. ) " A deep frown cut through his brow."--I love this visual. (that he wasn’t so much a sex expert, as an expert on her pussy.--Take out the comma.) As always, I am so excited for what's going to come next. My curiosity is at a fever pitch. More, more, more!

Starting to go into withdrawals....please update when you can!! Super keen for the next instalment x

You did it. I'm officially crying. I could feel his despair. Especially when he realized she really hadn't remembered. Just a little more time Severus. You can bring her back. I found out I'm pregnant hence my absence. I have a daughter and that mixed with the overwhelming tiredness, I've been resting as much as possible. But at least my tears can be explained as hormones to my husband (he doesn't understand my SS/HG fanfic addiction). Although I would have tears either way. My heart's still hurting. Can't wait for more!

What just happened at the end there? What is the mystery, what is it that Severus knows but Hermione seems unaware of? Please, please, PLEASE update soon, I need to know more!

A comma splice is a comma placed between two complete sentences. Like--The dog chased the cat, he wanted to play. That should be a period (or a semicolon, or possibly an em dash, or else it needs a connecting word so it makes sense). Oh, yes. I love a desperately lustful Snape. Excellent chapter. Super hot ravaging is always welcome. "consumed her in ravenous mouthfuls."-- Love this. "Smouldering eyes cauterising hers"--You are starting to freak me out. I used cauterized in Q too. Stop reading my mind! "Definitely sorely, fuck!!"--Snort. (heavily lidded--hyphenate) "In fact, it felt more like an oral worship of her lips, face and neck, leaving her gasping like she’d just engaged in a spot of deep sea diving, and him with another deliciously tumescent member jostling inside the dewy chamber of her pussy."--Loved the kiss worship and, for some reason, "tumescent member jostling inside the dewy chamber . . . " (build-up is one word) "Ensheathed"--Word notebook. Whaaaaat the fuuuuuck! So the hospital scene was real . . . and something more happened. Oh God, was she in love with him then? If she's not supposed to remember, I'm guessing he cast a memory charm on her. But I'm also guessing it might not have been his idea. So she wanted to forget. And that's part of why she's so fucked up--her life is wrong without him. I can think of lots of reasons she might want to forget, but I'm still eager to discover why he blew up the book. I'm not patient at all. You're going to update again before going grading, aren't you?

Did you not say something about light being shed...? All I can see is being led from the shadows into even more darkness of the labyrinth of this story's mysteries. Sure, it is entirely possible to draw some conclusions from this ending - that yes, they did have some kind of connection/relationship before - during the war? - and perhaps either of the two, most likely Snape, decided to use a well-placed obliviate on Hermione but as with her parents, the memories were not erased. They were only suppressed coming back to haunt her in vague dreams, random impressions and emotions. Alas, this is just one out of multiple scenarios I might imagine. So is this what you call shedding light on the issue? On the other hand, you got them together again and truly fast, at that. Also, I like that this time it was him arriving at her doorstep unannounced. It only seems fair when talking about two headstrong and yet insecure people. One always needs to start and it had better not always be the same person lest it become habit. Soooooo, I like it :) So much for the set up of the whole scene. That scene itself just proves again how talented a wordsmith you are. Once more we get to read a chapter that is equal parts amusing inner monologue as it is powerful and deeply emotional, not to forget erotic. Now, what will you give us to speculate about, next? And thank you for the vote of confidence on my English skills - let my 'vast' experience of three months spent in the UK, two years ago, along with fanfic and English movies speak for itself ;) ...only to get nowhere, really. What you might have noticed, is my erratic use of commas and prepositions. I am always unsure about these. I believe, it is mostly the reading that helped a lot, so far. Starting in 3rd grade with books in German, I discovered fanfiction after school, only to notice that there were far more stories in English - and what is an avid reader to do, but to read on? Anyway, it is winter for you - in June?! I mean, I knew that - theoretically - but I find it so hard to imagine, because the almighty internet makes distances, however great, seem nonexistent. However, I can relate to the 'flooding rain'. We get quite a lot of rain all year long, nevermind what kind of weather is to be expected from the current time of the year. For the strawberries, it was even useful - we had a few days of sporadic, but intense rainfall and from then on sunny no-cloud-in-the-sky weather. - Why on earth am I doing the 'weather-talk' online? It is certainly too late for me to be awake. I'll stop my rambling now. Thank you for another wonderful chapter!

Wait a minute! Did you change the POV, there? A rare occurrence, if there ever was one. And, I have to admit, one I truly appreciate. It is nice for me as a reader, to know both of their thought processes and actions, even when they're not in each others company. On the other hand, this way we know more than Hermione does and might be temtpted to think of things as obvious or given, that she cannot know with any certainty or at all. I can imagine that despite his insight, Snape is another person prone to overthinking - especially when it comes to interpersonal relationships...Well, he is the older of the two and has therefore collected more (varied) experiences to draw on for interpretation, but first comes the emotional impact, then the overthinking and afterwards some more emotion. Let us say, I liked this chapter immensely, even though I got to read it just now (busy weekend and start into the week). Thank you for your prolific writing! :) And what are you going to do about the mysterious legilimency/telepathy between these two? Now we have not just Hermione's issues, but also Snape's and their shared history to deal with - hopefully there will be some rewarding resolution in the end ;) (fine, when has there ever NOT been one, in addition to various in-betweens, nevermind, why am I asking?) As to my studies and such: Yes, Europe would be correct - more specifically, Germany, the eastern part of it. The 5 years are the regular time for most studies, but if one part takes you longer or you want to study abroad for a semester or two, the whole thing may go on and on ...8 years, you say. How did that work? Were there specific parts in your course of study and was it clear from the beginning, that it would take this long? The only students I know, who usually have to study for this period of time are the medical students, because they practically have to do their Doctorate right after finishing their 5-year diploma to be taken serious as a "real" medical doctor by future patients... Anyway, we're currently having some very hot and sunny days, which led to me and two of my siblings picking 5 kg of strawberries on sunday. Our mum had invited some friends over, so we had ice cream and strawberries, strawberry milkshake or just plain strawberries all day long and finished the last of them this morning. Enough talk about things you probably didn't actually want to know this much in detail. Thank you for the quick update and as ever, I am looking forward to any and all future updates.

Hahaha! I had to look up the tailed/trailed thing for my own sanity. "and what makes you think I do?"--Snort. Silly me. Fav lines this time were "on the rickshaw of her chattering teeth."--Love the comparison. "more of a Frankenstein of impressions that were cobbled together from her years of interactions with him"Frankenstein of impressions was great, and cobbled made it even better. (between them but she needed it, she was there for forgiveness after all.--I would change that comma to an em dash. It's too comma splicey as is.) Dammit, I loved the whole hand job scene. I won't copy and paste it all. "where he placed two fingers on her cheek,"--This is brilliant. Just in case there was any confusion about whom her story involved, she's made it quite clear with that one gesture. Oh my God. That was the most excellent cliffy ever. Now, I'm dying to see what happens next. More so than usual.