Wow I was starting to feel really bad for Snape for a bit.
Hello! You spelled fantasizing incorrectly twice so far. Or maybe the UK spelling is different? I’m supposed to tell you these things I suppose, I’m new to fan fic. I love this story! I love your writing and I’m going to read the rest of your stories. I am entranced, and barely got my chores done today because this story is so delicious. Thank you! I’m reading it with the same intensity that I read published pieces. Keep writing please;)
Chapter 1.
Lovely! Very sexy and very well written, perfectly worded. I like spanking and I like Draco watching :) Exciting piece.
Thanks Fox
P.S.
You can thank Oracle for me reading your story, her review is the best recommendation anyone could get. She is one of my favourite authors here.
Chapter 2.
I really enjoyed Draco's considerations and moral dilemas and his analysis of Granger and Snape's relationship -or lack of. Very good writing.
Thank you
Fox
Chapter 3.
Well, although the story clearly states Snape/Hermione, I had some doubts about her being there willingly at the beginning, based on Draco's observations. Now, the more I read the more I think, that Draco is simply deluded, but I find him quite sweet for his caring at least a little :-)
Thanks
Fox
Chapter 4.
I can't believe they went there together... if only Hermione knew she had an audience...
Well it was another sexy chapter, the more the better :-)
Thanks
Fox
Chapter 5-6.
This was brilliant! Honestly I didn't expect this kind of twist! I can't stop smiling, my face is hurting. I don't want to put too much info into this review, so I don't alert other readers-it can spoil all the fun. This was truly surprising. Very hot sex throughout, I loved the dialogues and the chapter length as well.
I am happy to have found it as I enjoyed reading very much.
Thank you for sharing
Fox xx
Well I don't know why hardly anyone is commenting on this story, but I'll jump in. I really enjoyed this. I started reading it when you just had one chapter posted, but I was too distracted/busy to stick with it. I told myself I'd come back and see where it went when I had more time to read. So here I am.
This was well-written and sexy—two things I don't always find in fanfiction. I thought the descriptions of Hermione and Severus were hot, and I loved the twist at the end. I like a Hermione who knows what she wants. And you masterfully skirted the line of inappropriateness by tailoring Hermione's charm to only make him do things he wanted to do. (Please don't take that the wrong way. I'm a fan of most things inappropriate, but I see how squeamish people can get about dubious consent when it comes to fanfiction.)
Plus you get bonus points from me for putting spanking in your story. Thank you for that.
I think what I liked most about this story was how much Hermione enjoyed everything that was happening to her. Sexually liberated Hermione is a fun Hermione to read. (At least for me.)
In terms of characters being OOC, I guess maybe I'm not a stickler like some people are. I can accept a lot of leeway. Maybe I'm in the minority when it come to that opinion, but I think an entertaining story (or just a good sexy story) takes precedence over keeping everyone strictly cannon. I didn't think there was anything OOC about Snape in this (or maybe I just subscribe to the same CP/Dom Snape you've portrayed here). I actually think Hermione can logically go either way when it comes to dominance or submission, so I didn't think this was off base. Draco was the only one who wound up going somewhere I wasn't expecting. He's got the biggest character arc in the story, morphing from peeping pervert misogynist to understanding caring defender of women. It was a large leap, but I'm all good with that. It certainly kept me on my toes.
I found your writing style extremely pleasant to read. There was nothing forced about it, and I got plenty of entries for my "words I like" notebook (that means I like your vocabulary). I wish that I had made some notes as I read so I could give you specific examples of parts of your writing that I particularly enjoyed. The only one I happened to save was "pins and needles crackling through his foot." That was excellent.
All in all this was a very entertaining story. I'll have to read some of your other stuff now that you've sparked my interest. And I hope more people leave you some reviews. (Over 8000 hits already. People are obviously reading.) This deserves far more praise than it's received thus far.
I really liked this chapter (ch2). I like how Draco is forging a truce with Ron. I'm surprised by Hermione's reaction to Draco's taunting, I believed she really was having an affair with Snape - I don't think Snape would curse/dose students without their knowledge and abuse them :-/
I like it! I look forward to reading the next chapter
