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Hi, I just wanted to say that I have really enjoyed reading your story, so far. It is an interesting idea, to say the least and full of surprises. One thing I just notices, though: Hermione is taking her 7th year finals, as far as I understand and that would be the NEWTs, (Nastily Exhausting Wizarding Tests ...or something)the OWLs came at the end of 5th year. :-) Anyway, just wanted to say that and I look forward to every new chapter.

Let me guess, she is pregnant! Keep writing.

Yeeeeees! Great chapter. You got a little bit of everything in there.

For some reason I really liked the opening scene with Hermione in the bathroom mentally preparing herself for battle. I'm not sure if I liked it because of the writing or the emotion. Probably both. I also liked the way they held hands before she started testing him. The sap in me likes hand-holding.
I don't know if it was wrong of me to love the stroking-interrogation scene, but I did. Not for the cruelty, but just for the descriptions of his cock.
When you said there was more sex to come, I didn't know you meant in this chapter. Hallelujah. I needed some Christmas smut (that I didn't write). Excellent descriptions, and I liked that she finally got to kiss him corporeally. So sweet.

Favorite lines this time:

"...broken sleep" I know this is really simple but I liked it.

"It seemed entirely inadequate but how else did one prepare to instigate a colossal shit storm?" I think I liked this for its blatant honesty.

"...trawl the depths of her malice..."

"...beautiful black orbs..." I know this is simple too, but it made me smile, so that means it gets mentioned.

"She closed her eyes against the pain of his openness" Beautifully honest.

"...rubbing them together like a surgeon scrubbing up. Wordlessly, she reached for his flaccid cock, gently rolling her oiled fingers over his silken sheath." I know this is two sentences, but they went together and I liked them both for the imagery.

"...shellacking his member in a glistening film that shone golden in the candlelight."

"...an alchemist turning his nuggets into gold." Okay, this made me laugh and applaud. Marvelous.

"She clung to him like a wet limpet."

"A real kiss for no other reason than they both wanted to

I'm having a terribly emotional day today and this made me cry so hard... I'm glad they found each other and I hope there's a happy ending for them. Everyone deserves love and joy in their love.

First of all, I would like to apologize for the tardiness of this review since I started reading about two and a half weeks ago. Hopefully it will make you smile.
Secondly, I would like to compliment your beautiful writing. I imagine you are also a beautiful person. I can picture vividly every scene you set and every emotion that crosses the faces of your characters. I read a lot of Snape/Hermione and your pair is one of my favorites. It's very real. Hermione's trouble coping after the war and Severus's hidden enjoyment at making his students miserable are perfect. Then the curse, oh the curse. It is not only ingenious, it's something I've never heard or thought of before. I very much enjoyed the combination of muggle and magical medical explanations. Severus making up his own name for his condition and refusing to change it when the curse is discovered seems very suitable for our stubborn Severus.
Third, your character development. It's fantastic. Your Hermione goes through so much emotional turmoil but still stays true to her character. She's everything I want to be.
Last, when Hermione climbs on top of Severus and he wants to touch her but decides that it's about her, that she deserves to do things however she wants, I felt my heart sweat. It was a great feeling.
I cannot express in understandable sentences the rest of what I want to say, but all my praises go to you. You're a fabulous writer, so creative, and way better than me at keeping up with things.

Oh wow! Chapter 5....

A human Snape.... Love your Endeavour and insight into what is clearly a controlling Snape..

Aww! So sweet. I'm sure this is the calm before the storm, but I'll take it.
I love how she's curling up with him every time Pomfrey leaves. That's what I'd do too. (Mmmmmm, Snape body pillows. I'll make a fortune.)
I did need this sweet chapter but I'm so excited to see what happens next. I take it Hermione has the Galvanismus and Snape is clear now. So my brain is bursting with questions about how they're going to get it out of her. I'm assuming they're going to try to go the other way around and put it in Snape's extra-corporeal body. Or is something totally unpredictable going to happen? Don't answer any of those questions. I like to be surprised.

Favorite lines this time (for words/imagery/honesty/humor)were:

"...had been firmly cocooned in multiple layers of starched white sheets

aargh, WHY are you stopping there!!

Yay!! It worked :) very lovely way for them to find each other... This story certainly allows them to balance each other out beautifully!!