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January 10, 2016 at 12:00 AM
What?! This is crazy. I so didn't see that one coming. Who is this crazy broad? Argh. I LOVE IT!
I love the way you write. You can just feel his pain, his anguish over what to do, and fear. He just wants her safe. He's so willing to do anything to keep her safe. I really hope he doesn't have to sleep with the crazy lady. I think that that would put a huge damper on their relationship. Oh I really can't wait now for the next chapter.
I love the way you write. You can just feel his pain, his anguish over what to do, and fear. He just wants her safe. He's so willing to do anything to keep her safe. I really hope he doesn't have to sleep with the crazy lady. I think that that would put a huge damper on their relationship. Oh I really can't wait now for the next chapter.
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January 10, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god, I loooooove The Hours. You just made me love you even more.
But just to stick my nose in your other conversations, I'm on the same page as LeWyKi. When somebody says "hello little girl" my automatic response is "What's your rush?"
Okay, onto the actual review.
Holy crap! I'm loving this. Violetta is the bitch we all love to hate. And she's going to trap Severus in her Violetta Flytrap? Nooooo! That seat is mine. ( I was very good girl today and rewrote about 80% of chapter 14
But just to stick my nose in your other conversations, I'm on the same page as LeWyKi. When somebody says "hello little girl" my automatic response is "What's your rush?"
Okay, onto the actual review.
Holy crap! I'm loving this. Violetta is the bitch we all love to hate. And she's going to trap Severus in her Violetta Flytrap? Nooooo! That seat is mine. ( I was very good girl today and rewrote about 80% of chapter 14
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January 9, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Mmm, I love a good cliff-hanger. Especially cliff-hangers that reek of wet fish.
You know when you're watching a horror movie, and they make it super quiet so they can scare you with a sharp burst of sound? That's how felt as Hermione contemplated her life on the tower. (Uh oh, it's getting too quiet. Something bad's gonna happen.)
I take it Lucius is the one who took her. I'm eager to see what the hell he plans to do with her. (Surely he doesn't just want a quick face lift. How much prettier can one man get?)
The opening lines this chapter were great. I loved the time stamp.
"It would be a misnomer anyway, the Professor of Sex was right here at Hogwarts." This just made me laugh.
Crucible - Okay, I had to look this up. I knew the other definitions, but not "ceramic or metal containers in which metals or other materials may be melted or subjected to very high temperatures." I need a crucible. For butter.
"...he was like a dog." The sniffing part cracked me up. Like what's the worst thing you could do with potion ingredients? Let's do a sniff-test.
Expeditious. What a delicious word. (Okay you used expeditiously but that didn't rhyme for my purposes.)
"...burst to attention like popping corn." When you appropriate a word you go all out. (You know you used popping twice in the same paragraph.) But I liked this variation. Popcorn nipples are great. (And go well with butter. See? I need a crucible.)
You know when you're watching a horror movie, and they make it super quiet so they can scare you with a sharp burst of sound? That's how felt as Hermione contemplated her life on the tower. (Uh oh, it's getting too quiet. Something bad's gonna happen.)
I take it Lucius is the one who took her. I'm eager to see what the hell he plans to do with her. (Surely he doesn't just want a quick face lift. How much prettier can one man get?)
The opening lines this chapter were great. I loved the time stamp.
"It would be a misnomer anyway, the Professor of Sex was right here at Hogwarts." This just made me laugh.
Crucible - Okay, I had to look this up. I knew the other definitions, but not "ceramic or metal containers in which metals or other materials may be melted or subjected to very high temperatures." I need a crucible. For butter.
"...he was like a dog." The sniffing part cracked me up. Like what's the worst thing you could do with potion ingredients? Let's do a sniff-test.
Expeditious. What a delicious word. (Okay you used expeditiously but that didn't rhyme for my purposes.)
"...burst to attention like popping corn." When you appropriate a word you go all out. (You know you used popping twice in the same paragraph.) But I liked this variation. Popcorn nipples are great. (And go well with butter. See? I need a crucible.)
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January 9, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Ummm.... there's no such thing as too much naughty?! But if you ever get to the point where it IS too much and it becomes a chore to read, then I will be the first to tell you. You haven't disappointed me yet, and I really don't think you will.
I liked how she misses him after only a few days. That made me smile. Awww. I didn't smile however at the cliff hanger. That's okay. It just excites me for the next chapter. I can't wait to see who it is. I do hope it's Lucius or maybe even Draco.....Hmmmm....
I liked how she misses him after only a few days. That made me smile. Awww. I didn't smile however at the cliff hanger. That's okay. It just excites me for the next chapter. I can't wait to see who it is. I do hope it's Lucius or maybe even Draco.....Hmmmm....
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January 9, 2016 at 12:00 AM
who -- what????
Draco? Lucius??
Draco? Lucius??
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January 9, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I've just now read the new chapters you posted over the week and have to say, thank you for all this reading material! Now the only question I'm asking myself is: Friend or Foe? Or alternatively I just completed the line like the wolf from Into the Woods "...what's your rush? You're missing all the flowers, the sun won't set for hours..." but that's just me having listened to that musical one time too many. Anyway, thanks and as ever I am eagerly anticipating every new chapter
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January 9, 2016 at 12:00 AM
This story is absolutely amazing! I can't wait to read more. I found your story to be so amazing that I found myself having to review a story on here for the first time, and I have been on this site for maybe 8-10 years! I think you should also post it on archive of our own. It is a newer site but has a very easy way to interact with the readers. Also, for selfish reasons, it is easier to get notified when the author updates the story. :) Once again, you are doing an amazing job with the story. Happy new year!
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January 8, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I particularly liked your comparison of Hermione's nipple to a kernel of popcorn. The imagery of the clouds in the sky above the astronomy tower was also striking. It was elegant, descriptive but brief.
The extracorporeal projection was a nice treat, I'd sort of missed those interactions. My favorite projection is still the one where Severus writes Hermione the letter, but I also like when she gets him off at the head table during breakfast because it was nice to see him really lose control for once.
The extracorporeal projection was a nice treat, I'd sort of missed those interactions. My favorite projection is still the one where Severus writes Hermione the letter, but I also like when she gets him off at the head table during breakfast because it was nice to see him really lose control for once.
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January 8, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I've been reading your stories since about a week ago... and just realized there were new chapters on this one. Way to leave. cliffhanger, omg! Brilliant writing, though. I agree with. previous commentor that even I would read 200 chapters. :)
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January 6, 2016 at 12:00 AM
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