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for His Fathers Mistakes

by TheKitten

schedule June 27, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Very promising start. I am interested in how Harry and Severus get together after the mistake of James. I did notice a few spelling errors in the story. Just take your time when you check it over before you post the next chapter.

-Drizzt
person Jan
schedule June 27, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This was a good start, however your going to have to look out for spelling, there were a lot of misspelling throughout the chapter, here are a few from the last paragraph: autopiolet is spelled autopilot, Fealing= feeling, fitfull=fitful; think about getting a beta, they'll help you with the spelling and more^_~ besides that, I'm looking forward for more updates ^_^ so please update chapter 2 soon.