rate_review Reviews

I can't say I'm a fan of the Hermione/Zabini, since they completely don't know each other.

I'm surprised Harry isn't going after her, after him response to her...

Would like to see Harry with Cho and Luna.

Nice!!!

Well done. You did a good job of showing the lowered inhibitions, and I appreciate that you're keeping it to pairings that are plausible. (Too many authors would use it as an excuse to pair people who hate each other, which drives me nuts.)

This story is a great idea! For pairings next, you should do Ron/Lav, and then have Harry turn into a total manslut with all the girls (and some of the guys) constantly chasing and catching him. Either that, or a group of girls organize to do basically the same thing, only vetted by them.

I liked it, i think you have better English than you think! Good work!

As a suggestion, i'd like to see Hermione Granger with Blaize Zabini from the movies.

I read by far worse fanfictions and I couldn't find a mistake you seem to make everytime which I could point out to help you, the only thing you maybe want to now is that you used spectate wrong, you only use spectate if you want to see something over an amount of time, a game, even then to spectate is rarely used. Results is something immediate it's the end of the changes not the changes in itself, so you look out for them or you see them, later in the story you used it to see the results which is fairly better.