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Just found and read this wondrful story - It's far too good not to be continued.

Please, please, please update again soon

Please update  i like to know what happens next 

I really liked your story so far: smooth flow, good characterisation, and nicely paced, even the odd few spelling mistakes don't detract from the world you are creating, but as Harry and Co are English and the canon is set mostly in England, or at least in the British Isles, please, please, please be careful with letting unintentional Americanisms slip in. It is only ever 'Mum', 'Mummy' or 'Mother' never 'Mom'; 'trash' not 'rubbish'; and we don't 'fix meals' unless they are broken - we 'make dinner' or 'get dinner ready' or even 'serve dinner'. That said, please don't think I'm picking on your writing, I found the piece eminently readable, it's just that those few little things break the spell, which is a shame as the overall standard is very good. I wish you well in your writing, and can't wait to read the next chapter. In case you're wondering why I'm only raising these points now, it's because I haven't been on AFF for years and only just found this and read it. Please do keep it coming. If you would like any help with a final proofing, I would be happy to offer, as you might suppose, I am English, and very much the same generation as JK Rowling. If it helps to establish my credentials: I lived for quite a number of years in Palmers Green, North London; where they filmed one of the scenes with the Knight Bus (Night scene, with a long line of shops on the right edge of the screen).

Love this story! Miss you

Awesome!!!! Loved the Book of Shadows at the 32nd.

Wonderful chap! Looking forward to more. :D

very nice x-mss Harry had Good..the book of shadows (charmed ones ) almost fell off my chair with that one..but good , in the story, anything that can help Harry is ok !!!! thanks so much for the update and happy holidays !!!!!!!

I like sweet chapters like this one😊 a very nice and warm Christmas day🎄 please update chapter 26 soon

Really fun chapter!

I love the gifts, so perfect. Thanks for the Christmas present!

good chapter, was hoping to read it last night but by the time i was gona read it, it vanished.
so like what each gave each other. plus i liked what little connor gave to them as well. wondering what harry will be able to use from his book of shadows.