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February 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM
Well, the story had some cute parts, but I don't feel that Severus was portrayed quite right. And also how it went so fast to them suddenly being engaged? That just came from nowhere, and totally didn't fit. It was like the story was wrapped up much too quickly. I would have liked for them to be together longer, maybe discuss their hidden feelings for each other during school. And Severus calling her ,love, just doesn't fit. He might call her that in privacy, but showing that kind of emotion publicly is so far from his character. This story definitely needs more development.
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December 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This is quite an interesting and refreshing story: quite different from many others.
I wonder if the concept of "photography club with artistic/erotic focus" is your original idea, or is somewhat based off some real world examples.
Lastly, I wish the Lucius subplot could either be removed or further developed. As it is, I feel it is an incomplete subplot. For example, Lucius might try to get Hermione and Severus to his rose garden, of which they might reject violently, reject with some understanding, or embrace the idea.
I wonder if the concept of "photography club with artistic/erotic focus" is your original idea, or is somewhat based off some real world examples.
Lastly, I wish the Lucius subplot could either be removed or further developed. As it is, I feel it is an incomplete subplot. For example, Lucius might try to get Hermione and Severus to his rose garden, of which they might reject violently, reject with some understanding, or embrace the idea.
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December 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
The Lucius thing is such a turn on. Snape not my cup of tea....
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December 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter4. Oh well, shame. I really liked the camera club voyeurism thing. You could have gone so much more naughty with it. But it's your story you tell it where it takes you....
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December 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for an awesome story. Hopefully you will do a 3 chapter sequel. especially with luc reaction
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December 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1: Hilariously funny!!! Me. Fenwick I can picture him. A Victorian era 'no sex please were British' type of blushing gentleman....
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December 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
An unexpected scenario for Miss Granger. Possibilities for the future abound. I can't wait for what direction you take.
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December 19, 2014 at 12:00 AM
What a great night for them! Thank you. I only hope he was distracted and not disinterested. It seemed he had fun, so I hope he doesn't plan to break her heart. Thanks! HG4eva
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December 19, 2014 at 12:00 AM
great 2 chapters
but i think sev is in over his head... i bet he did something that he shouldn't have done
maybe luc was there taking silent photos especially in the bedroom
hopefully he will only bruise her heart and not break it
waiting for more
but i think sev is in over his head... i bet he did something that he shouldn't have done
maybe luc was there taking silent photos especially in the bedroom
hopefully he will only bruise her heart and not break it
waiting for more
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December 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I am really enjoying this story. I like the slow buildup, very sensual and realistic seeming. I can't wait to read more!