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Omg you have got to finish this.  What is the prophecy?  Who is potters family?  What twin? Is it hermione?  A uggggh finish please.

You need help with spelling and tenses guessing English might not be your first language but this story has promise :)

Wow I wonder what the phinox let Harry see !!!!!! so good, now I really can't wait for more !!!!!!!! Thanks for this and please update soon again !!

Wow are you ever going to update this one again !!!! pls. do !!!!!!!!

well that was good !!!! more please !!!!!!!

Chapters 1 & 2: Hmmm off to a good start.

Well Draco knows now how harry feels haha poor boys. Loved the chapter!

I noticed the voting and thought I'd give a few thoughts on that because you might be confused because your feedback was good. You have a good mix of both dialogue and action. The story progresses well though you could develop some things a little more (that Seamus relationship seemed to start and stop out of nowhere). However the biggest problem is the grammar. The structure of your sentences is awkward and interferes with the flow of your story. A beta can do a lot to help in this area so please do keep writing but don't be to discouraged about your rating. That will improve with a beta.

Nice start !!!! hope to see more soon !!!!!

Awesome start to this story! Im hooked cant wait for more! :D