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An interestin Approach, unfortunitly it seems you have abandoned the Story

First off I would like to say how much I enjoyed the opening to this and avidly looking forward to seeing more, I have yet to come across this ark in the potter-universe and kudo's on that.

my actual first review on this site so I can only assume that you will read this, and gives you the fire to write more as you should write more I mean you really should.

anyways good job on the first chapter and good luck on the rest of this fic.

please continue!

I really hope you would see it in you to update this often you got one of the best starts in a story theme of this style. I also would find it interesting that so long as Harry picks or completes a goal he set after he died, or one of his original goals. It could even be as simple as his friends out living him because he is Martyr would allow him to get another chance at life almost 100 percent of the time, so long as the majority or even all of his friends out live him. So well the voice may have said one thing the fact he earned he assures til he gets 100 percent on each goal he sets each time he dies, as well as the goals the game gives him he has til its done, and in doing so his friends do as well.

Nice, very nice, this is a different approach, what with the not remembering he's in a game once it starts, but not bad, managed to make the intro fairly interesting
Grammar and spelling check out nicely, no major errors there, and it flows nicely
Not too crazy about the being no afterlife, but this is a rather minor issue
Keep up the good work
Huh, looks like I'm the first to review, nifty,