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for You Complete Me

by Giovanna

person Alex
schedule January 18, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Love this story so much!
person Diana
schedule January 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Update soon!
person Anon
schedule December 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
ohhhhh i can't wait to read what happens next. and im starting to think that maybe Arthur weasley was under something from the very beginning... or maybe now he is finally realizing the truth that his own sons have been trying to point out to him for the longest time; years really.
oh also how do i add an author and a story to my favs on here? cuz i would like to add u and your story to that list if i can.
laters,
Fox
schedule December 2, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Please update please
person BAFan
schedule October 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 5

That was a most interesting dream . . . or whatever it was! Whew. ^o^

I've decided that for each chapter I review, I'll pick one misspelling to bring to your attention. That way I won't inundate you with corrections and maybe you'll remember the single one I point out. If you would rather I not do this, just say so and of course I'll stop.

". . . This spurned Harry on more, he wanted to make his Master proud because he was able to please him in something as simple as swallowing him whole."

I see this mistake a lot. "Spurned" means rejected. (She spurned his offer of marriage.) The word you want is "spurred," which means to urge on or incite, as in spurring a horse to go faster.
person BAFan
schedule October 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 8

Poor Snape, he's getting a lot of shocks in this one. *snicker* Good chapter!

". . . Holding Fenrir, who was still in wolf form, by the gruff of his neck. . . ."

I think you mean "scruff" not gruff.
person staar
schedule October 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for this but hope I don't have to wait long...I want to see how he kills ron,hermione, ginny !!!!!! enjoyed the updates see you soon !!!!!
person Meiya
schedule October 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
And off they go to Hogwarts yay :D The fun is just beginning. Can't wait to find out what's wrong with Mr Weasley. Was a great chapter (9).
person snape_lust
schedule October 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Quite enjoyable. I'm especially glad that you have included the notion of boundaries and equality within Tom and Harry's relationship. It makes it so much more interesting to read. I laughed when harry took him to task for treating him like a DE and informing Tom he will punish DE's that don't listen to him.

Lastly, I think this is the only story I've read that is adult enough to acknowledge that people have different roles in and out of the bedroom. Just because someone might like to assume a sub role while fucking doesn't mean they'll tolerate it once the clothes are back on. I know I certainly don't :-) I can't tell you how many times I've had to educate my partner(s) to that fact.

Well done!! I can't wait for more!
person BAFan
schedule October 23, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 4

"He smiled as if the answer was so simple even a child could figure it out. He stood up walked over to me brazenly and sat in my lap, running his hands through my hair. He leaned in and whispered ever so seductively in my ear 'I am going to kill Albus Dumbledore.'