schedule
September 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Intriguing story, and overall pretty good writing. I'd love to read more!
One thing keeping it from being easy to read - the writing is actually quite good, however I'd suggest getting someone to proofread your work for correct use of tense - it is all over the place, and rarely correct.
Keep writing! It'll only get better.
One thing keeping it from being easy to read - the writing is actually quite good, however I'd suggest getting someone to proofread your work for correct use of tense - it is all over the place, and rarely correct.
Keep writing! It'll only get better.