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October 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Good action sequence in the forest. It got my heart racing, lol. I really enjoyed the showdown b/w Lucius and Draco. It was intense.
Great job.
Also, if you like dark romance where women are held captive...go to Good Reads. I randomly ran across a bunch of them one day. I've been meaning to recommend the sight to you, although I'm not sure how you would find them. I guess the search engine.
Great job.
Also, if you like dark romance where women are held captive...go to Good Reads. I randomly ran across a bunch of them one day. I've been meaning to recommend the sight to you, although I'm not sure how you would find them. I guess the search engine.
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October 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I am really confused about what happened in chapter 42. I know Narcissa arrived to save Draco, but it was all sort of rushed. That chapter could use fleshing out.
I've liked the story, so far. I do believe that it could have been a little more in-depth all around, but I'm glad for the quick updates.
Thanks
I've liked the story, so far. I do believe that it could have been a little more in-depth all around, but I'm glad for the quick updates.
Thanks
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October 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Swollowed should be swallowed?
I like your angst an poetic qualities.
I do like dark and twisted stuff not sure why, maybe the fantasy is enough, that is why I started writing my own fix. (usually not my habit to plug my own story in a review.)
I like your angst an poetic qualities.
I do like dark and twisted stuff not sure why, maybe the fantasy is enough, that is why I started writing my own fix. (usually not my habit to plug my own story in a review.)
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October 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I was really looking forward to you killing Ginny off.
Why is it so hard to kill a bitch?
Why is it so hard to kill a bitch?
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October 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
That was a weird twist. Giving up children for Ginny? It does make sense with how veelas are obsessed with their one and only.
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October 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Haha love that of him being jealous of his own son.
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October 5, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Yes! Calm but seething on the inside Draco is much scarier than insanely angry Draco.
Now, his Slytherin is showing.
What is he planning.
Now, his Slytherin is showing.
What is he planning.
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October 5, 2014 at 12:00 AM
So Lucius has a secret mate and children. I feel for Ginny, which is who I guess she is. I'm very intrigued. There's some depth in here that I like. I hope you keep digging.
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October 5, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Look at Lucius getting his little bit of heaven on with Ginny. I wonder if Ginny is as pliant as Lucius thinks, or if she's only biding her time. I do like that you're actually capable of writing someone who feels redemption. Lucius did terrible things, but he regrets the actions he took to claim Ginny. I sadly don't think Draco will ever get there. I say Hermione kill him. That's dark. he he.
I know you like dark, but I hope you don't kill of the twins.
I know you like dark, but I hope you don't kill of the twins.
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October 5, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I am glad you have decided to continue the story like this without making a Part II until later. The plot got thicker. I do enjoy the dark aspects of fanfiction, too. Chapter 32 has gotten me excited. What will she do?