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Stupid question for chapter 16, but I just have to ask. Who between Alex and Hermione got the bigger chest? I'm skimming the fic mostly because Wizards of Waverly Place is something I just barely heard about when it was on air. Oh well, it's different I guess. :)

Fun story ,light read ,moves well .

wtf? I feel really sorry for Mason and her brothers at least Mason is free now... this alex character is such a bratty little bitch that i would love to see her just get smacked in the face a couple times, what an annoying, rude, horrible excuse for a person. I wish her first brother would have been able to drag her whiny entitled ass home with him instead of getting shocked, or at least a good backhand across the face for attacking him like little brat. Then later she is just like 'oh it's okay im a stupid horny bimbo when im drunk.. i mean like uh god! you were the one who said i could drink anyway so it's your fault that i was flirting with other people right in front of you and then end up sleeping in their arms.. i can't handle your jealously anymore, you should trust me, we are though and it's all your fault!!' -- and why is the dad acting like such a bitch? he is constantly worried or about to cry or something. Also, what kind of mother doesn't care their daughter stayed out all night and might be in mortal danger? She must be one seriously cold bitch, i guess i could see where the daughter gets it though if that's what you were going for... Anyway i hope the characters grow up fast or get hit in the face a couple hundred times...

"That made him a bit uncomfortable, thinking about a boy spending the night in Alex's room. But he couldn't really say anything without seeming like a jerk."
Uhh yeah... you can say you don't want men spending the night with your daughter in your house without sounding like a jerk... or at least stay in the room and chaperone... I don't get it, do you hate women or something? were you cheated on by your girl? why do you seem to make all the women in your story such annoying and stuck-up insane bitches? Why wouldn't harry/hermione be more worried about some unseen magical power that is forcing them both to lust for this random girl they just met? or magically forced sex a normal/accepted thing in this story?

It is sooooo much easier to criticize than to compliment a piece of work for me, but i also wouldn't get frustrated and rant about characters if i wasn't at least somewhat emotionally invested... I don't like some of the characters, and i've been very harsh in my focus on that, but that doesn't mean it's not a well written story. The story flows well, it's well formatted and there are no or very few spelling/grammar errors which make it easy to read...