rate_review Reviews

Ch. 1

I really enjoyed this first chapter. Like you, I always thought Harry should be with Hermione, not Ginny. (Well, I did until I discovered the wonderful world of HP slash, and now I delight in Snarry, Drarry, and others.)

A couple of corrections:

". . . Harry, for his part, seemed completely oblivious as he continued to kiss Hermione until they finally parted to breath." Should be "breathe."


"The next few hours passed in a blur as people filed past the family, offering their condolences. They were eventually approached by a solemn group from St Mungo's, who lead them through the floo in the Headmaster's office. . . ." Should be "led."

Ch. 2

Very nice chapter. I had to chuckle when Harry finally realized he was too tired to make love to Hermione. Duh. Silly boy.

"Luna had just shouted something about a 'blibbering humdinger,' whatever that was. Everyone else looked out the window, but not Harry. He quickly rose to his feet, wordlessly grabbed Hermione's hand again and lead her out the shattered frame of what used to be the doorway between the Great Hall and the castle's foyer."

Again, should be "led."

Ch. 5

Harry, Hermione AND Draco? Man, Dolohov is one sick bastard.

Ch. 5 (again)

"Harry raised an eyebrow, then glanced down. 'Whoa!' He muttered quietly."

Forgot to say that this bit made me lol in spite of the drama.

Ch. 7

"AN - I'm really glad this part is over with...." Me too!