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for The Long Defeat

by Lomonaaeren

person Jester
schedule July 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh what are they going to do to the gobblins??
That reminds me .. Harry would be without anything if he left the wizarding world.
I mean he has 0 money because of the goblins. The Weasleys and Hermione would help
him sureley, but they do not have much themself. Did he think about what to do afterward?
person SP777
schedule July 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
about #8..

Damn, on the one hand, it was cute how Draco was trying to get his attention, then,
on the other, I thought for sure Harry was going to beat the snot out of him for mockery. O_o
person Jester
schedule July 2, 2014 at 12:00 AM
The more you write and the more I read I hope for Harry to gain his
freedom back. Away from the mass of wizarding Britain.
Not that I think that Dracis wants him to do that, but thats the
feeling I have. Harry as bodyguard is quite sexy though. He would
be more if he was free and willing to do so. ;)
person SP777
schedule July 1, 2014 at 12:00 AM
about#7..

He can say what he wants, but Harry makes an effective bodyguard.
Will you actually let Harry leave the Wizarding World? It would be
a shame if he does.
person delia cerrano
schedule June 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Going well! Liked Harry as an A#1 bodyguard. He could start his own company. I can't believe the people and goblins. After
all, if Harry hadn't killed Voldemort, at some point he would have taken over the bank & killed or made slaves of the goblins.
Yet the people & goblins are ungrateful and cruel besides.
person Sp777
schedule June 24, 2014 at 12:00 AM
About #7...

I get the feeling the Malfoys and Harry will learn a lot from each other
when this is all said and done.
person Jester
schedule June 23, 2014 at 12:00 AM
That developes wonderful. I like Narcissas way and I like the way you handled Lucius crimes
against Harrys ... family.
I can not wait for the next chapter. I look forward to it.
schedule June 22, 2014 at 12:00 AM
The way Harry acted in the last chapter, granted it was to fool the goblins, something about it made me feel uncomfortable. Sorry for the confusion.
It makes sense now. Harry wasn't comfortable with it either.
person Anon
schedule June 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
After this year of psuedo servitude when he mostly won the war, endured the Dursleys', and all the manipulations of Albus he has got to be changed and probably not in a good way...savage temper, no patience and wanting to have absolutely nothing to do with "the public", goblins or the Ministry. Draco will have to really work at it if he wants him to stay.
schedule June 19, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I got the cold shiver down my spine. I know it's not real, that it's an act, but something about it is off.