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I read this once before, and left without leaving a review, hoping there would be more next time I came back, but there’s still the same amount as last time I read it, which is disappointing, because it holds a lot of promise.

Please update 

Nice when is the next update !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I have to say I do like the premise of this story. I just read the original, and while there are a few grammatical/spelling issues, it is easy to ignore them for an original plot. It's original, and fun. I think putting a new revision of the original chapters is a good idea. Making them less summaries of what happened and more of how it happened is a good thing to do. Try filling out scenes with more detail like how Dumbledore reacts at the Goblin's explanation, how Snape reaches the point of putting away his hatred of James Potter (because it doesn't happen overnight), and even where the letter Remus wrote to Dumbledore went. I really expected that to come back somewhere.

I really do hope you continue writing and revising this story. If you ever need help, ideas, someone to edit or just someone to say "Hey! That's awesome!" just let me know :)

Wow this is really a good start and I can't wait for more...