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by katiecld

person Ice Empress
schedule March 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
GlassWaters may I say your story is gripping, starting to be potentially erotic and I can't wait for more. The rape scene was tastefully done and the descriptions of the mental agony manifesting into Hermione's chest pain and the yawning opening of the Void is simply stunning. I must admit the corset part was my favorite. I can just see her when she's a little bit better grinding her hips into Severus as he punishes her for a lapse in judgment. I can't wait for the next update!
person Missycam
schedule March 2, 2014 at 12:00 AM
You're welcome Dear!
And I'm glad to know they will share the private quarters ^^
Thank you and update soon ;-)
schedule March 2, 2014 at 12:00 AM
GW, I didn't notice any issues this time *clapping*. The story seems to be moving forward well and I like that Snape and Hermione are sharing quarters for the time being. I also liked that Hermione asked Severus about his being at the bar and that she still plans to find out. As always...More, Please!!
person Missycam
schedule March 1, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I don't know why I didn't read this sooner but I'm hooked!
Please update soon! ;-)
person sailorgemini
schedule February 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
vai avanti cos
person pooh
schedule February 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
fast paced? love that, I have just finished an interesting, but slow story and at times it was a challenge to read on. this story has an interesting concept...looking forward to the next chapter...thank you for your almost frenetic story. hehe
person Excessively Complex
schedule February 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Really great couple of chapters, its nice coming to a fic to find two new chapters! I really like it, I don't see any of your errors and English is my first language so I wouldn't worry about that too much. Love that Hermione called Severus in her moment of need :)
schedule February 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I just finished chapters 4 & 5; I am glad to note that they had fewer issues. I can understand the difficulty, especially with English not being your first language. Author AgainAndAgain who writes 'Just Submit' has the same issue. I do want to tell you that I am still enjoying your story. The tension between Severus and Hermione is palpable, that is something that not every writer can accomplish. I am looking forward to how Hermione and Draco's relationship grows. I have just one last comment...More, Please!!!
schedule February 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Mm I'm impatient too so don't worry about that :) Loved it again, please continue!
schedule February 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I will admit that there are some annoying errors. I would recommend a beta. That being said, the story has potential. Especially if there is smut with Snape and Granger. When will Hermione think to ask how Severus happened to be at 'that' bar both nights? Or am I the only one who is curious? I hope that you continue this story. So I will say this...more, please!