rate_review Reviews

Ok...I've got to say you stunned me with Sirius' reaction. In a way it makes perfect sense. Like a little yo pulling a girls pigtails because he likes her, Sirius picks on Severus because he likes him and Severus just won't pay him any attention...well the good kind at least! Let's hope that they can both see past the past to maybe a brighter and more loving future? Harry's new patronus is so much better and stronger than the stag as it represents him and not just him being his father's son.

~~ Meechy

Smthe Malfoys join the fold and Lucius shows more intelligence and loyalty to his family than previously done. He now has the cup and doesn't need to rescue the dragon now....such a pity the poor creature is still to be chained. But amazingly, Harry now has a chance at true happiness and a passion that could be history in the making. I always thought Harry and Draco were like oil and fire and now we get to see a true inferno ignite! It should be delicious.

~~ Meechy

Ch. 3

Did you do something different with this chapter, maybe use a different program? I'm asking because the font is so tiny I can hardly read it, and it wouldn't enlarge or format properly to the page size, which hasn't been a problem with the other chapters. Just wondering.

Good chapter. Harry seems in control and is making mature decisions and plans.

Yeah! New chapter!

I love how this is progressing, nice pace. I also enjoyed the changed potion class and other interactions between Snape and Harry.

Just one little typo nit pick. In the paragraph where Harry is confronting Pansy there is a place where you have "didn't not want" -- which kind of reverses your meaning.

Ch. 2

In your reply to my review of Chapter 1 you said, "thank you for the review. I honestly did not know it was a common theme, but now I'm curious and may search out for my own entertainment the works of others similar...I am a sucker for Drarry or Snarry..."

There are tons of Drarry and Snarry stories on this site. A lot of them are even good! ;-)

I liked this chapter, especially that Ron didn't throw a hissy fit about Draco. Oh, and wonderful idea about the coins. I also noticed that you know that someone toes a line, they don't tow it. Unless, they're pulling an actual, physical, line, of course. ;-) However:

"Draco pocketed the note, though loathe to leave his solitude, he made his way back to the castle."

It should be "loath," which rhymes with "both" and means reluctant. Loathe is a verb and means to despise or hate. Going on to Chapter 3 now!

I look forward to each new chapter and finding out how Harry deals with blending the past into a brighter future. I'm sorry Draco has already had to pay a small price for his new friendship to Harry but in the end it will be worth it for the both of them. Severus has tried sme of Harry's suggestions with an open mind and they too are showing good results. I'm glad that Harry took sme time to talk to Sirius. Maybe he will grow up this tme.

~ Meechy

Brilliant idea. I, personally, think that by changing the relationship between Harry and Sev to a paternal relationship woul help Sev become more open to love and freeing him from Voldie would do the same. Let him find love. Are Remus and Sirius together? Because if they are Sev coul have Tonks!

So I really, really like what you have written so far. Love how Trelawney's eyes look big as dinner plates. She has always cracked me up. As for Snape, I would like to see him move on. He has sacrificed so much and just needs to chill with someone who is away from all the Order mess to bring that light to his life. He needs that happiness. I can't wait to see what you have planned next. Here's to the next chapter. :)

Oh and if we are fixing mistakes please get Sirius a mind healer. He spent too many years as a dog in Azkaban.

Love what you've done so far and an looking forward to your next chapter.