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YAY!! I was soooo happy to see an update and 2 chapters at that!! Harry needs to back off Dracos woman lol, the attack on the train was great, gave people a chance to see what they are made of!! Fingers crossed for an update soon!!

This story is wonderful! If you have completed it, please share! I've been checking for an updates almost daily for over a month now. I'm dying to know what happens.

Dont let the criticism get you down, myself and others love your story!! Hope to see another update soon!!! Fingers crossed!!

I just felt like saying that your grammar is fine,for the purpose of just reading for fun, it is fanfiction and fir fun not for profit or impressing anyone im assuming.mistakes happen and honestly no one has perfect grammar and those who are being overly judgmental are just rude. There are kind ways of telling someone they should work on their grammar and a few of these people seem to lack that ability. Honestly your variety of word choices/vocabulary is more important to me (as long as you use the word correctly which you do) as well as the development of plot and characters is more important than some easily ignored or looked over grammatical mistakes. Sure a beta would be great, it's always good to have a beta, but I dont think that its necessary. Obviously my grammar sucks to a point also but oh well all you can do is work on it haha

Ahhh that was short but so great I hope u get a chance to update soon again love this story

I do love the story, but you need to fix the 2nd chapter to be before the third. It confused me greatly when I started reading to suddenly come across the 2nd chapter 5 chapters in. I know it will be a lot of work, but it will be better in the end if you do this so players don't get confused. Simply rename the chapters accordingly and copy/paste the chapters into their correct chapter placement. Since its only 4 chapters that need changed it shouldn't take more than 10 minutes to do it. Also I'd suggest reading over your chapters a couple of times before post and fixing any errors you've had while writing, maybe even finding a beta reader to help you as well.

You may be a great story teller, but I'm sorry to say that I don't have the patience to find that out. Your grammar and punctuation are so poor that they make your writing unreadable. If you're going to this much effort to write something, find a beta reader to help you, or learn the proper rules of grammar and punctuation.

First, I would like to throw out there, that critiquing someone else's grammar with a comment full of grammatical errors is very unproductive.

Secondly, your grammar isn't horrid. There are some errors, but it is not unreadable. Every writer can benefit from having someone else read over their work.

Thirdly, I love this story! This last chapter did feel a little stagnant. Waiting over 2 weeks for an update when the story is already complete, coupled with updates being subject to change if enough reviews aren't given is irksome. The story itself is wonderful, but if the frequency of updates start to be completely based on review counts, I will have to bid you adieu.

Yay an update!!! Was so excited when i opened and saw there was one!! Great chapter i only wish there was more for my own selfish desires!! Fingers crossed on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter!!

Thank you for another good update! I really enjoyed their reprieve and chance to grow together. I liked her family, her realizing (at least somewhat) that she's a girl and he's a boy, and him being more open and forthright with her and learning what a real family is like. I think they almost had more growth their than on their own with that maniac teacher. Thank you once again and please update again soon! HG4eva