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for Daytana

by Galaxy_Mine

person ChaosLady
schedule November 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. That's quite a twist!
person ChaosLady
schedule November 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Tamara is a girls name. So is Tamar. The story is good though, despite the grammar mistakes that drive me crazy.
person ChaosLady
schedule November 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
It's vial not "vile".
person ChaosLady
schedule November 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
It's Knight Bus not "Night bus". It's Kreacher, not "Kreature" and it's appetite not "apatite". Okay, that's all the things that were bugging me. Is it Severus that is messing with Remus or is it someone pretending to be him? I'm confused about that part.