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It is a great story. Chapter one should be 6,7, or 8!

Hi, It's a great story. Will you continúe?

this is a really fun story! i hope you manage to find the inspiration to update soon (^_^)

 

Well over a year now :( Hope you come back

Please continue this!

Hope you're planning to update soon? Been quite a while again and I hope this doesn't get abandoned.

Have you considered posting this elsewhere such as HPFFA alongside here? You'd get a lot more reads and reviews there, which might help motivation.

Looking forward to the rest of this.

I feel that your building the plot slowly but, not too much of a problem I think you need to start building Harry's confidence and get back to the "present " with lily being pregnant with her sons kid . I don't think James should find out let them work around him and maybe even make him think that the kid is his.

Hope Rosa and Heather join in on the lessons!

Doesn't really make a lot of sense for the lessons to take a slow pace and have Lily explaining what's going on to Harry then the first time they have sex it happens almost by accident in front of his sisters. It feels like we missed chapters in between or something.

Plot-wise, I think things might have been a bit rushed when compared to the pace of things before this. Although that could be attributed to things just escalating quickly due to anticipation, but that doesn't really fit what's written thus far. If that's what you were curious about. I wouldn't call myself an expert, or good even, at writing though, so don't put too much weight to my words. I will say that regardless of any issues, I still eagerly look foward to the next chapter, and those after. This is a great fic, plot-wise, when one considers that it is smut based. So congrats there, and thank you as well. Anywho, I should stop rambling, so I'll leave things there.

~Wulf