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for Fragmented Soul

by StrawberryGirl87

person phoenix-rob
schedule June 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Loving the story.
schedule June 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
a grumpy Fenrir. Fun, fun, fun. Ohhh...Micha and Damon is just sooo cute :) the revelation of Damon's first time really shocked me o.o good thing I wasn't eating or drinking that time or else my cause of death will be all over the paper xD thanks for the update i hope you guys are doing well in your new home! I can't wait for the next update.
person DragonStar01
schedule June 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Welcome back! I missed the you guys! It's so fun to hear more about Micha and Damon--I can't wait for Clayton to find out...
schedule May 31, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I hope that Clay and Harry will cause havoc again driving the residents of Hogwarts crazy. I also hope that Remus will join the pack though when he does he's out of Dumbledore's thumb. I pray that Fenrir will not be that hard on Clay. Also, I MISS SEVERUS!! I also hope that Lukas will finally open up to the pack about Nell to avoid doubts on him I rather like Lukas and his tea obsession. I wonder what will Nell's reaction be when she learns the truth. Btw, Voldie's been quiet haven't heard from him (not that I miss him) =) and thanks for thw update! wishing Micha happy birthday too. I'll send a box of chocolate for Micha (wonder what's Damon's gift for him is)

person Sara
schedule May 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Cool chapter, I really hope the conversation goes alright as Lupin's my fav and he's already suspicious of Dumbledore and Sirius.
schedule May 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
thanks for the update! that end will really eat me until the next update :) as for my thoughts, I'm torn as to whether Harry will interrupt before either of the older wolves can speak or maybe Fenrir will go Alpha on him.
person Jan
schedule May 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I get what your saying, but I guess that what truly don't understand is that for a while now I've been thinking that both Harry and Remy.... and some of the pack, don't truly care for Clayton, I mean they proclaim that they love him, and that he's family, but None of them has ever truly been there for him, except for his dad, all they ever truly do is judge him, or try to change who he is.
From the moment that the pups started school it feel like both Harry and Remy have been treating Clay like he's no more then their bodyguard, they truly haven't been there for him as friends, let alone family, thought that's always the first thing that comes out of their mouth when someone ask about their relationship. Whenever he's down and upset they don't try to be there for him, they always let him be, and when they finally do go to talk to him they start by scolding him, then they're mad at him, and blame everything on him, they don't see that he wouldn't feel like that in the first place if they hadn't ignore him so much.
Please update chapter 48 soon.
schedule May 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM
thanks for the update! Btw, with clay's first detention with umbridge the wounds just healed right but this recent one why it didn't? Thanks!
person Jan
schedule May 19, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I know that your more then Likely planning on setting Romy and Clayton together, but I truly hope not, I feel like Clayton needs to be with someone better, not someone so pushy and demanding, and unwilling to accept him for who he is, someone who doesn't appreciates all of his efforts and always thinks she right all of the time(like when she says that he doesn't really love her, then he doesn't really love her period!), he deserves to be with someone that is open both mind and heart to him. (I was with someone that reminds me strongly of Romy's character, and I'm sure your just making her like that because they are still young and still learning about themselves and life, but in reality all that will change in a character like that is they learn a bit more of themselves, and learn to manipulate people a little better, not truly thinking or caring or noticing the other person feelings.) And all this going behind Clayton back isn't helping him, if anything it's making him feel left out, unwanted, and maybe a little unloved, most of all by his father, and best friend(Harry because every time something happens and Clay goes, Harry wants to go after him, but Romy is always stoping him, and it always results with Clayton feeling unneeded) they need to be upfront with him like his dad needs to tell him about Micha, for both Clayton's as well as Micha's sake.
Please update chapter 47 soon.
person Kat
schedule May 15, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Dumbledore and Malfoy Sr need to both get their comeuppance. They are both bullies.