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for The Problem With War

by scarletladyy

person eJs
schedule February 23, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Heartbreaking
schedule October 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
The premise has potential. But the story falls short of its promise.

The technical writing has issues. Several typos and misspelling.

The sexual aspects are under-done. The characterizations are difficult to buy into. George, Fred, and Ron torturing a young woman to death for daring to have a brief lez affair with Ginny back in school?

Again, the premise has potential. Maybe another swing at it, author?