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Hermione has no idea what she's done when she allowed him to clasp that necklace does she? She just trapped herself with someone who is like Harry but meaner and harsher

Ok whoa did not see her burning the contract, but good for her to show a little initiative. she wants him to realize that she may be special but really wants to hit it home. There is nothing wrong being equals just as fun to submit sometimes as being dominant. And Both a light and dark side of the order huh does that make daphne as special as his treasure then? But great writing. Poor daphne keeps getting the brunt of Harry's anger

A most excellent story! There aren't enough Dom Harry fics out there (at least there aren't enough HeteroDomHarry fics out there), and this one just hits the spot.

I really like the way Hermione fights the leash. I've always seen her as a closet submissive, but one that isn't really aware of it. Her love of having someone in authority over her is too great to not be.

One thing you might think about doing for your readers deals with the nicknames. Changing the names is frustrating, because I have to go back and search to figure out who he's talking to. Try this. When Harry speaks to one of them, he uses the nickname ("Whip, come here!"), but when you refer to the girls in authorial voice, refer to them by their real names ("Yes, Master", replied Daphne.) That will keep it clear who he is speaking to, as well as keeping the flavor of the master renaming his slaves.

I also love the fact that each girl has a distinct personality, her own likes and dislikes. It keeps your story from descending into PWP, and keeps the characters interesting. I don't normally like Ginny portrayed this way, but you make it not only believable, but you've make her a very strong character. I see her as a Ph

Hmm... I don't know. One of the only things that Harry had going for him was that he'd given Hermione a completely unique position in his 'order'. Now Daphne's essentially the same thing. It cheapens H/Hrs relationship (although I get that it's not exactly conventional), but otherwise, Hermione really isn't different from other girls in the order and he doesn't really need her. I don't see Hermione coming back to that.

I hope Hermione comes back to harry soon, I don't like Daphne being the centre of attention!

Oh goodness. Talk about hot and bothered. I really hope Hermione learns... Thank you for you wonderful writing!!

Boo, I want Hermione back in Harry's fold. Cormac is a bad Dom and daphne just isn't Hermione.
I love the direction you're going in. I think Ron is taking this whole Ginny thing very well. Luna has always been my favorite character in the books, I love how she has handled being a sub. Kinda wished harry had gotten a hold of her first. She would make a wonderful treasure.
Ginny continues to surprise me, or rather unveil herself in a way that is helping me understand her character in the book better. Being the youngest in such a big family, I'm not surprised that she would outwardly appear bossy, head strong, and quick to fight but internally she must crave being guided and shown what is what. She has always liked older guys, guys with power. I don't believe that they ever showed what Ginny wrote to Tom in the diary but I don't doubt for a second that she probably enjoyed the attention and then there is harry who is all famous and powerful. Gin has a type. Hmm...
Off to go see what kind of fun snape had with Ginny.

nice chapter...
looks like Hermione is still trying to fight her nature...
when will she go back to harry...
more soon...

ok, first, in response to your response, since this is marked as Harry/Hermione, I think she, at some point will go back to him. That being said I like the chapter, and the way that you showed that while he does respect her decision, he does not particularly like it, or who she ends up with, and it was a pleasant surprise the fact that you forgo the Ron explosion, make its better and more refreshing that well used blowout.

That was hot. I can't believe Hermione ran to McLaggen. When she comes to her senses I hope Harry punishes her for it. I love how Harry doms Ginny. There are hardly any fics where Harry doms her, but plenty of her doming him. I love Daphne's punishment. I wonder how long he can make her go without an orgasm.