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I just wanted to let you know that i love the story so far! I love the side stories as well especially Snape and Ginny!!!

Love the story so far can't wait for the next chapter

Just as was suspected. The question now is how Hermione reacts to the little revelation about the necklace. Now you mentioned that it's a "contact", though I'm thinking it's a typo meant to be "contract" since he made her say she was his & to not be alone with Harry. I'm hoping that, next chapter, there's a path out of this darkness. Specifically, if it's a contract, that means that there needs to be some way to break it. If the contract cannot be reversed or cancelled, then I shutter to think what Harry will do in response to the information. I do hope that Snape will do all that's possible to release her without severe harm.

I'm going to be frank: your story provides a LOT of submersion. So much so that I'm not sure if I'll want to keep reading, lest I not like future events or the ending. I'll keep it bookmarked and trust that this will once again deserve the Harry/Hermione tag it started out with.

Loved the scene with Tracey... I thought I'd never say this but thank god for Snape and Ginny for figuring out about the necklace. Now let's see if Hermione still is the smartest witch of her age and figures out about the necklace and Cormac.
You said that Hermione both knows and doesn't know about her nature. If that's the case, I think you should write a chapter completely from Hermione's POV in the future , in which she considers her actions with both Harry and McLaggen since the beginning of this story and finally admits her being a submissive.
Great chapter.. Next one soon please..

It's nice to see Ron being useful! Looking forward to the next chapter.

so the collar is altering her personality! I wonder how many will take to have hermione take it off.

I loved the Harry and Tracy scene. I loved the chapter. Not much more to say except that Harry's plans seem to be moving forward.

Since we don't have the ability to reply directly to another reviewer, I need to respond to what one of your previous reviewers, hugplx, said about Cormac and Harry behaving the same way. It's completely incorrect, and shows a lack of understanding of Dom/sub relationships. Being Dominant is not evil or wrong, nor is being submissive. They are two sides of the same coin, and each needs the other to be complete. What Harry is doing is being a dominant. He takes control of his submissives and their lives -- WITH THEIR CONSENT. He doesn't take any girl against her will, as shown by his willingness to let Hermione go. Cormac, on the other hand, used a mind control device on her -- WITHOUT her consent. What he did was no different from slipping a girl a roofie, or raping her. The difference is consent. All of Harry's girls are there of their own free will. There are two sides to their interactions: Harry dominates, the girls submit. Each party has agreed to how their relationship is to be. With Cormac, he stole Hermione's free will with the amulet. There was no sharing, there was no agreement - Hermione has made it clear she was not ready to accept that side of herself yet, and would not have agreed to wear the amulet had she known it's effects. (On the other hand, if Severus offered the same amulet to Ginny, and explained exactly what it was, she's probably accept with pride. But he likely wouldn't offer - it would cheapen the gift she's given him.)

wildkitsune, I love the way you are making a distinction between Harry as a Master, and Cormac. Harry wants submission given freely, while Cormac isn't master enough to get the submission without mind control. While some might see Harry's gift as a form of mind control, all it really is is the ability to identify submissives more easily. Harry was willing to let Hermione walk away if that was what she truly wanted, where Cormac has enslaved her against her will. The contrast is wonderfully done, and really helps highlight the difference between a caring master and a selfish abuser, for those readers that don't understand the difference.

I also like the interactions Harry has with his girls. I remember something I read once about the 'Platinum Rule'. The Golden Rule states that you should treat another the way you, yourself would prefer to be treated. The 'Platinum Rule' says that you should treat others the way THEY want to be treated. Your Harry obviously read the same book I did, because he lives it. I love the way he, Snape, and Draco, bargained for Ginny like she was a piece of parchment. Not so much because they needed to play that out, but because being treated that way meant a lot to Ginny. Beautifully done, and depicts your Severus as a caring master more than any other scene you've done.

I'm really looking forward to reading more of this story. Thanks for writing, and for sharing it with us.

Maxtaf

One problem you have is that your lemons are too short and undetailed. It starts and ends in barely a few paragraphs.

ROFL

Oh that's precious.

Cormac does what Harry has been doing the whole fic and he's suddenly painted as evil.

It actually made me smile. I'm not sure that you intentionally tried to make Harry look more like a hypocrite, but I thank you anyways for the laughs.