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It appears that this story has long since ceased to continue, but I commend you on how seamlessly and masterfully you created it. The depth and intentions of the characters are very unique and easy to relate to, to understand. It is truly a work of art.

I enjoy this story a lot its dark and slightly disturbing but it feels like the last two chapters were very ... Mushy for lack of a better word. Hopefully you have a plan for it to pick up again if not then of well its still a very good story.

Now although I usually don't read OC fics I thought I would make an exception for this one as I was looking for a Dark!Snape and...well...its not bad. Snape isn't realy dark although he does have somewhat more selfish interests. The story, pacing and characters are decent enough. Much better then the stuff most other people are writing. In fact I probably wouldn't even be commenting on the story if I didn't see the one big error with this story which you said yourself was supposed to be dark. That point being Voldemort. Here we have the most sadistic, insane, bastard ever born( Even Rowling said he was pure evil) and in your story is is so ...meh. I mean really? He convinced Lavender to be his consort by praising her and cajoling her? ER, what? I would have expected him to take her, lock her up, torture her both physically and mentally, have his death eaters rape her etc and then, when she is pretty much ready to die and wishing she was dead, he would show her some insignificant peace of kindness. She would then develop Stockholm syndrome and start to think that he really cares for her.Instead he bought her pretty things and complimented her * facepalm* So much for the insane overlord thing. He's pretty much just a normal bloke here.In fact I hardly see any of the evil insane part of him. No random torture for the fun of it, no sadistic pleasure in death, NOTHING. He's just boring -_- and why have you made him good-looking? It really detracts from the fact that he is an ugly snake faced bastard. In fact it would further underline how far Lavenders sanity has slipped when she starts to find him arousing instead we get the Mills and boon/ Harlequin romance muscled chest and big cock...how predictable.

Wonderful!! I am so glad that they are finally together. Now I can't wait to see what happens next!! More, please!

I have been reading this story curiously from the start. I enjoy the intelligent and dark Snape greatly. The fact that he has taken pleasure in many girls at Hogwarts over the years, but is really looking for someone he can call equal while at the same time have that person submit to him completely is an idea that I find to be very much in line with how I see Snape. (okay that was a long sentence...) I like this take on Slytherin, and more so Death Eater politics. I must admit I was worried for Snape when Brown got the upper hand and decided to use it against him, and I am very glad to see he has found a way out. I feel I must state I am not a person who is interested in slash, but I find this last chapter (chapter 13) to be interesting in how it displays the dynamic between a Lord and those who serve him loyally. To me it seemed as if it was not the sex that aroused the two men involved, but rather the connection they found as Master and Servant. As a whole I am finding this story very interesting to read, and I am greatly looking forward to the next chapter.

Poor Lavender *like hell*, she did not see Snape's true devotion to the Dark Lord. But now the Dark Lord, knows the depths of Snape's devotion to him!!! Lavender will pay for her miscalculations and if she is not careful, she may end up paying with her life. AFTER the children are born of course!! More, Please!

Oh, what an excellent punishment for Lavender!!! This chapter was PRICELESS!!!!!!!!!!! More, please!

Oh, that was a very tearful chapter!!! More, please!

Lavender is getting a bit too power hungry. But then what do you expect from a person with only a portion of LV's soul? I do have to admit that I liked the threesome. More, Please

Ah, poor Lavender dies...but wait, she lives again. But with only a small part of LV soul. I sense that she will become more Slytherian in the future. How will poor Severus get Miss Hightower to agree to be 'HIS' now? The plot thickens! More, Please!!!