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January 8, 2020 at 12:00 AM
A interesting Idea for a HP Story, unfortinutly a bit plagued by Typos, and also unfinished. Shame really
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November 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You might want to look into the correct use of the word "thou" you seem to be using it as if it was "though" and not as an archaic word meaning basically "you", "your","thy" or "thine". For example take the commandment: Thou shalt not kill.
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November 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
But do not take the criticism as anything other then constructive! I Enjoyed the story and you should continue writing just check or over a bit more before posting or get someone else to beta read it for you so that they can spot the mistakes a single set of eyes sometimes miss.
Good luck with the story!
Good luck with the story!
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October 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
so...many...typos!
the idea is good but the sheer amount of typos and misused words makes it painful to read. please, please work on that.
the idea is good but the sheer amount of typos and misused words makes it painful to read. please, please work on that.
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October 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You need more of them between paragraphs and less in the dialogue