rate_review Reviews

I wasn't going to review but after reading the last two reviews, decided that I must. First, I love this story. It has an interesting premise and, as is usual for you, it is handled with sensitivity. I appreciate that you gave us the opening and then had Sirius look back over the time so we didn't get bogged down in unnecessary details but you provided us with the information we would need to go forward. I, for one, appreciate how you foreshadow, giving enough so we know that something is probably going to happen and while we may have some idea of who, how, what, where, when and why, we don't really know for sure. It keeps us guessing and it makes reading this story exciting. You make the characters so read that the reader becomes emotionally invested in them.

This chapter made me cry. I hurt for Harry, for his confusion, for his anger and for the lost little boy who needed to know that while he was going through all that horrendous stuff, someone, somewhere, had in fact once loved him. This chapter showed just how far Harry has come from the way he was in Chapter 1. It was awesome.

What I found interesting about the last two reviews is that they were posted by people who obviously did not read with comprehension. First, it is stated quite plainly that Harry was taken off the doorstep before the Dursley's ever saw him. Therefore, they would have no reason to alert anyone that he was missing. Second, while I have appreciated your "action" in other stories, this story demands a different approach as, as this chapter demonstrates, so much is psychological and emotional, not physical. I won't even get into how foreshadowing is not unnecessary bits of fluff.

Anywho, thanks for a great chapter and, as always, I look forward to the next one. Hopefully we'll see everyone decked out in their garb and I'll find out if I caught the hint I think you made.

I sometimes find myself getting frustrated with some of your chapters. I can see that you're putting a bit of information in, but nothing's actually happening. What happened in this last chapter? They talked. That's it. They. Talked. I would have liked to have seen them do more than just talk. Your chapters are long, but most of the time it's just filler. Stuff that we don't really need, or that could've been shortened so that you would've had the space to add something else.

You also do a lot of telling, rather than showing. If you tell me something, I feel like you think I'm too stupid to understand what's going on. Don't tell me that someone did or didn't like something. Show me that they did or didn't like something. Show me through their actions, their expressions. Don't insult me by just blatantly telling me.

Everything I read so far is really great, so excited for events to come :)

Excellent chapter! I'm curious about the next chapter! thanks for writing it!

I was wondering how long it would take before they tried to see him. Will Harry ever give his siblings a chance? I mean, they are just kids. Great chapter as always!

ch4: Don't blame Harry in the least for being pissed.

Lovely story! I like it thus far and am looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing!

Ch. 3

After reading the first chapter I was quite ambivalent about continuing with the story, and so didn't read Chapter Two. Not quite sure why I decided to check it out again, but I'm glad I did. I am so relieved that you skipped ahead with the timeline. The upcoming chapters should be extremely interesting as Harry copes with what he is sure to feel is another betrayal. Can't wait to find out what Albus, James and Lily react when they learn all the details.

yea. THem returning is soooo not going to go over well

Wow...I am glad Arthur and Molly are taking Harry's side in this. It really serves the others right. I don't care what the reason, you don't abandon your child like that. Sad to hear Ginny died, but I like the twist since most people write a different way for her to live or ignore that all together.