rate_review Reviews

Interesting. I especially liked the first chapter. It was a little too vague in the 2nd chapter (did Malfoy kiss Harry vague) but I liked it :)because the thoughts flowed well but it isn't as easy to follow when the action and interaction between characters is written in that style.

Not a fan of slutty Draco even if he is trying to find himself...wildly jealous on Harry's behalf I guess. Your writing is a little pouffy (the wording) but you know what? I'm still reading and anxious for the next chapter. Can't believe Harry just walked away!

Refreshing. I like the rhythem in the words. The way it reads and flows somehow reminds me of one of my favorite obscure books. It was written in 1981, much different to the books of today, which I tend to find lacking. Some of your sentences are a little strange and I guess 'incomplete' and even though I actually like it that way- something about it is nice...I don't know why- anyway, I don't know if you did that knowingly, but I thought I would tell you just in case you didn't. I personally don't see anything wrong with it. Like I said, just letting you know. Right so, thanks for the read, patiently awaiting more. E

You write beautifully; it is has a poetic elegance and an intensity which is rare and hard to capture. Looking forward to see what you do with this and hope you manage to maintain the style of this, which makes it stand out in a crowd of much sameness.

Looking forward to the next chapter. Hope they are not at complete loggerheads for too long! Would love to see them putting everyone else in their places and wondering at their closeness.