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by dainty_morsel

schedule August 3, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please do continue! I like it very much so far.
person NoxDesires
schedule August 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow! There isn't much else to say.Please update sooner rather than later!
person Missycam
schedule July 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh ohhhhh That's promising!
Update soon please ;-)
person Bkd
schedule July 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Christ, I just wrote this review and it never posted.

So I'll try and replicate the damn thing.

I was going on about how great it was that you didn't have this long-winded, overwrought explanation of why Hermione and Snape want each other. Yeah, it's all fine and dandy to explore that side of things, but not all in one go and not at the expense of the Fic's flow - pace - whatever. So in short I like how you dealt with that, and you could explore it later and I wouldn't mind that.

I liked the lead up to the smut and the actual smut itself - was quite zesty.

If you still need a Beta, I can do it. I'm not an English Major at Uni, but I'm pretty decent at grammar and all that lark. I have an opinion too, which I think every Beta needs or else what's the point? I just know how frustrating it is to not have one, so if you're desperate I'll take one for the team lol.

Keen for an update.
person Anon
schedule July 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Dont end the story here!! Please give us some more!
schedule July 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Well that was one hell of a beginning!! I couldn't stop reading. :-) I look forward to your next update! Thank you, HG4eva
schedule July 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I love this story and PLEASE do not finish it there. Update SOON I would love to read more.
person Reaperit
schedule July 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Veeeery nice!! Written real well. I'm excited! Update soon :)
schedule July 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I do rarely review. You desperately need a beta- your tenses are all over the place. :-p But it was an encouraging little piece that does tempt the senses. Pity he didn't make his presence known.
schedule July 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
WOW snape dancing MMMMMMMM the waltz would be better if they were dancing thre tango!!!! MMMMMMMMM

The band were just beginning to strike up a waltz and Hermione suddenly found herself in the arms of the one Hogwarts professor who still intimidated her..........


oh and is there more to this story or is that it??