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im glad that snape is taking the news well and is angry at the right people. tomorrow will be interesting day and i cant wait to till you update again! please do it soon.

Oh yeah! Update!

Enjoying!

LOL I love this thank you for the update more when you can hun

Good but short, very short, chapter. (just saying). Love that Snape and Harry are together, they know Snape is his godfather, and are about to reek revenge...I hope. Never liked Albus and wasn't really surprised at the Weasleys, maybe a little at Hermione.

I like this story. I can't wait to read more.

Oh boy I'm glad I'm going to be a fly on the wall when Harry goes to tell Severus all about what's going on!!!

now if i was harry the first thing i would think about back when i was a first year would be how can i get the dursley's to leave me alone using magic? now it may end up taking 2 or 3 years for harry to find the spells and learn them but you figure by the end of third year i would have braclets with compulsion charms and notice-me-not charms on them for each dursley.


now as far as pairings go i would pick harry/collin/dennis since the creevey brothers would do ANYTHING for harry potter plus no one would think twice about collin and dennis leaving to go to their dorms right after harry leaves for his. an if someone did happen to notice them sneak into harry's dorm they would only think the 2 little pervs. are hoping to catch a view of harry wanking in the shower.

I like your story so far. But don't have multiple people speaking in the same paragraph. Start a new paragraph when you switch speakers.

Just finished Chapter 3. Oh, boy, is someone in trouble now! I have always liked fics where Harry finds out he's being manipulated (I mean, it's just plain ridiculous to have a Secrecy Act and the Weasleys talking about Platform 9 3/4 in front of Muggles, not to mention using the word!)
Can't wait to see what you have in store now.

be careful of the trap of making harry too magically powerful and having those powers come too easily to him....it doesn't leave many area's for the story to go other than social or political conflicts. Just because he has mage abilities doesn't mean he doesn't need a teacher to learn how to use them and has to work hard to master them. i read that this is your first story in english and surmise that it's not your first language, so it's easier for me to overlook the grammar and spelling errors but a spell check should catch many of your mistakes. a pet peeve of mine is using "gonna" instead of "going to". I don't know if "gonna" is even an official word.

a typical betrayed!harry story, but since that is one of my favorite genre's you have my interest. I look forward to reading where you take this harry. My personal preference is to read a story where harry chooses neither side and takes off for parts unknown outside of Brittan. after having hired a publicist to combat negative publicity and protect his reputation and lawyer to handle all the political and financial stuff....only getting involved when necessary.